TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews

Between 1960 to 1980 sailors that were going around the north Atlantic and Arctic oceans, hear unfamiliar sounds. The staff of the ships and submarines simulated these sounds to the frog, hence they called it "quackers". There is not any decisive theory about the origin of these sounds, however theory that is not proved yet. The professor in the lecture explains the imperfections of each theory.

First of all, she states that wales could not make such noises because they live near the surface of the water. The professor explains that the sounds had detected in the deep water, hence the wales could not be the source of these sounds because they live near the surface of the ocean. This point contradicts the first theory in the passages that state the wales were the source of these sounds.

Second, the professor believes that giant squids were not the cause of the sounds because they are still living in those oceans. The first theory in the passage acclaims that the giant squids made those sounds. But the professor casts doubt on this theory and illustrates that the sounds stopped in 1980 however, the giant squids are living in those oceans. She also mentions that the squids should not rapidly stop making the sounds, therefore this theory cannot be true.

Third, the professor makes the point that the secret submarines in another country were not able to make such sounds. Because the sounds disappeared in around and changed quickly, hence the sounds could not be able to transfer from another country.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... able to transfer from another country.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, second, so, still, therefore, third, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 259.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95752895753 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33041570238 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451737451737 0.540411800872 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 368.1 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.0769230769 49.2860985944 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.7692307692 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9230769231 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35345874122 0.272083759551 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129684710005 0.0996497079465 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069740234756 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216688585784 0.162205337803 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0105292036319 0.0443174109184 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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