TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The article says that humankind can't inhabit Venus and provides three reasons of support. But the professor refutes those reasons one by one.

First, the article claims that the atmosphere pressure at Venus's surface is at least 90 times greater than the pressure at Earth's surface. The professor disagrees with this idea and mentions that humans can establish a station which is flooding about 50 kilometers above the Venus' surface. In that way, there will be much lower pressure compared with the surface and the station will face pressure equal to the earth's atmosphere. Moreover, there will be no crashes because of the extreme pressure.

Second, the article posits that there is no reservoirs of water on Venus' surface, and the planet's atmosphere, made up mostly of carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid, contains hardly any oxygen or water. However, the professor states that since there are so much carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid, it's possible for humans to do some chemical processes to produce water. Thus, it's not necessary to import water from Earth to Venus.

Third, the article mentions that very little sunlight reaches the planet's surface. About 60 percent of the sunlight that hits Venus is reflected back into space by the thick clouds that fill the atmosphere. The professor refuses this idea and states that as we go higher and higher from Venus' surface, the clouds go thinner. So since we are building the base flooding about 50 kilometers above Venus' surface, the clouds which resides there are not very thick and there will be more sunlight passing through them. Additionally, we can use the reflections of the sunlight and build some solar power cells in the station that uses direct sunlight and the reflections in order to produce electricity needed by the station.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
The article says that humankind cant inhabit Venus and provides three reason...
^^^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e professor disagrees with this idea and mentions that humans can establish a sta...
^^
Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...station will face pressure equal to the earths atmosphere. Moreover, there will be no ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no reservoirs'?
Suggestion: there are no reservoirs
...ure. Second, the article posits that there is no reservoirs of water on Venus surface, and the plan...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'planets'' or 'planet's'?
Suggestion: planets'; planet's
...oirs of water on Venus surface, and the planets atmosphere, made up mostly of carbon di...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'contains'.
Suggestion: hardly contains
...n dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid, contains hardly any oxygen or water. However, the profe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, moreover, second, so, third, thus, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06375838926 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39184546598 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51677852349 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7563206077 49.2860985944 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.785714286 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 21.698381199 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 7.06452816374 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.464759079787 0.272083759551 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150940793466 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798155384076 0.0662205650399 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238627441764 0.162205337803 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112955841352 0.0443174109184 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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