TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The topic is about the negative impact the glass building will have on the birds. The reading passage introduces three solutions to prevent injuries to birds. However, the lecturer thinks none of the solutions will work effectively.

To begin with, the reading passage claims that one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction will reduce the injuries to birds. On the contrary, the lecturer argues that the one-way glass is as bad as the regular glass, as it will reflect just like a mirror. Bird cannot understand a mirror, so they will think it still is sky and trees and fly directly towards it.

The second solution presented in the reading passage is to have regular window glass painted colorful lines or designs to warn the bird. The lecturer, however, indicates that the bird will preserve the area on the glass where is unpainted as the open hole, and try to fly through it. Therefore, the unpainted area of the glass need to be very small to prevent the bird flying to it. In this way, the room inside will be too dark for people.

Thirdly, according to the reading passage, the bird has a natural ability to sense magnetic fields, which could be created to guide birds away from the building. In contrast, the lecturer disproves this point by saying that the bird use the ability to sense magnetic field only when they travel very long distances. For short trips, they use eyes and brightness of light to navigate.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, second, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1197.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 251.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76892430279 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33400858394 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533864541833 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 359.1 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7836933842 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0769230769 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.536763296924 0.272083759551 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175005962186 0.0996497079465 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083074612089 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292304696411 0.162205337803 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0925511707701 0.0443174109184 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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where is unpainted as the open hole
where it is unpainted as the open hole

the bird use the ability
the birds use the ability

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 251 250
No. of Characters: 1155 1200
No. of Different Words: 133 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.98 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.602 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.246 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.119 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4