TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitiv

Based on the given set of the reading material, the fossil information about the Agnostids, a group of marine animals living about 450 years ago, cannot yield in the details of how and when they lived. The author suggests 3 hypothesis about their lives. However, the lecturer holds an opposing view about all theories presented in the reading and refutes each of them with the following reasons.

Firstly, the lecturer aknowledges that Agnoistids were similar to other types of primitive swimmer arthropods, but she believes that these mysterious species were not predators. She states that predators must have large well developed eyes, like primitive arthropods, in order to be able to catch their prey. That being said, the Agnostids had tiny poor eyes and some of them were actually blind. As a result, they might had some other special purpose organs to chase and catch their preys and this idea clearly opposes the fact that they were free-swiming predators.

Secondly, the speaker believes that seafloor dwellers mostly occupy small territories and they are more localized rather than spreading through the seafloor. These qualities are obviously attributed to the species which are not capable of moving fast on the seafloor. However, evidence illustrates that Agnostids were occupying multiple geographical areas in the sea and they were able to move quickly and easily through the sea. As a result, the advocations of the writer which Agnostids were seafloor dwellers seems to be unusual for these species.

Finally, the author suggests that Agnostids were parasites, living and feeding off larger ogranisms. The lecturer, on the other hand, deemed this idea invalid too. She believes that if the population of the parasites were too high, they might have killed their hosts. According to this fact, parasites were living in small populations. However, the vast amount of fossilized remnants of Agnostids demonstrate that they were living in large populations. This clearly rules out the third theory about agnostids.

To put it in a nutshell, the speaker goes against the ideas presented in the reading passage and she believes that some other hypothesis may account for the actual way that agnostids were living.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hypothesis' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hypotheses', 'hypothesises'.
Suggestion: hypotheses; hypothesises
... when they lived. The author suggests 3 hypothesis about their lives. However, the lecture...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, well, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1373.03311258 137% => OK
No of words: 357.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26610644258 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56430911805 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535014005602 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 419.366225166 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1689396419 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.444444444 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424348901279 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126466072683 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684801274747 0.0662205650399 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218467348049 0.162205337803 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800818381318 0.0443174109184 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 63.6247240618 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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