TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The article states that storing patient's medical records in electronic databases would have several advantages over paper-based record keeping, and provides three reasons of support. However, the speaker explained that those advantages are not powerful and useful as they look like. She refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that using electronic records can decrease costs by decreasing costs of storing and transferring of medical records. The professor refutes this point by saying that doctors don't throw out or discontinue storing medical records, but they keep those records for back-up, and they are required to do so. Therefor, in her opinion most doctors already pay storage cost.
Second, the reading claims that using electronic medical records can reduce errors which are basically due to illegible handwriting, improper transcription or organization. The professor posits this point by saying that most doctors still use paper and pen to take notes and write prescriptions. Also, she said that the staff is responsible for entering the information into the electronic system, so this still can lead to errors.
Third, the reading states that using electronic medical records may help in medical research by gathering large amounts of data from patients medical records. The professor opposed this point by saying that it's difficult to access and use medical information from electronic database. She states that it is subject to strict privacy laws and it is a complicated procedure by which they need to take permission from the patients. Some patients would even block the use of their own medical statements, and this would make it harder.
As a conclusion, all the advantages of using electrical medical records mentioned in the article was opposed by the professor in the lecture point by point.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 199, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...futes this point by saying that doctors dont throw out or discontinue storing medica...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35862068966 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69624303727 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524137931034 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.968380042 49.2860985944 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 7.06452816374 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.528113508289 0.272083759551 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179212090041 0.0996497079465 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152189335333 0.0662205650399 230% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294502246506 0.162205337803 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831116643572 0.0443174109184 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.2367328918 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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