TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The passage and the lecture discuss whether storing patients' medical records in electronic databases could be beneficial or not. The author of the reading passage presents three reasons to explain that electronic databases would be useful. However, the lecturer believes none of the reasons could precisely support the claim.

The author argues that by using electronic records the costs of storing and transferring of medical records will decrease. The lecturer argues against this reason and believes that changing to electronic records will not cause a significant reduction in the costs. Moreover, medicals will use paper records as the emergency back up sources. Therefore, they will still pay storage costs of the paper-based records.

Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that using the electronic records will reduce the medical errors which are caused by reasons such as; illegible handwriting and improper transcription of data. Nevertheless, the lecturer illustrates that electronic records could not stop these problems. In addition, doctors take note of their patients on papers. Besides, staff read these notes and enter them to the computer. Consequently, the possibility of medical errors due to illegible handwriting and improper transcription of data still exists.

Finally, the reading passage asserts that electronic record will help researchers by bringing a wide accessibility of patient records. The lecturer opposes this point by explaining that patients' records are subject to strict privacy laws in the United States. Therefore, researchers should maintain a lot of permissions in order to use this records.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 247.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7044534413 5.08290768461 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85574658609 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53036437247 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0888422874 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9333333333 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4666666667 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485229802527 0.272083759551 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17058679315 0.0996497079465 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119411911203 0.0662205650399 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299067892592 0.162205337803 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591435033819 0.0443174109184 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.48 12.2367328918 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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