The writer doubts what causes the 52 - Hertz whale to produce different sounds as the other known whales and even lists some theories to interpret it. In the lecture, however he uses three points to support that each of the theory is unconvincing.First, the writer believes that by uniting features from each of the parents’ species, two different whale species may have hybrid future generation. Nonetheless, the lecture obviously contradicts it and argues that unlike all other known hybrids，it has its own unusual migration pattern and migrate alone. In fact, hybrid whales typically travel together with normal whales and if 52 - Hertz whale is a kind of a hybrid. Besides, scientists prove that by studying the location 52 - Hertz whale song, that is not a site of migration alone for whales. Second, despite the statement in the reading that the 52 - Hertz whale may copy the sounds of other whales’ songs as they have an inaccurate sense of hearing, the lecture contends that the 52 - Hertz whale’s poor hearing may be resulting from the extremely high pitch which depends on the physical structure of whales’ throat. For producing a sound in such extremely high pitch, the throat structure caused by a damaged sense of hearing is unusual since there is no connection between hearing and throat structure.Third, the writer shows that as an only member of the scarce whale, the 52 - Hertz whale could be unique since almost its species have been extinct. Nevertheless, the lecture opposes the reading’s evidence. That 52 - Hertz whale is the only known member of rare species is impossible. They may have parents who sing by using the same frequency, and the technology to detect whales’ sounds underwater has been in use for decades. No signs of such whale’s sounds have ever been heard before this one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Hertz) must be used with a third-person verb: 'whales'.
Suggestion: whales
...riter doubts what causes the 52 - Hertz whale to produce different sounds as the othe...
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Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: First
...that each of the theory is unconvincing.First, the writer believes that by uniting fe...
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Line 1, column 652, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...mal whales and if 52 - Hertz whale is a kind of a hybrid. Besides, scientists prove that ...
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Line 1, column 1313, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Third
...on between hearing and throat structure.Third, the writer shows that as an only membe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, so, third, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02649006623 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71793800143 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539735099338 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.4066909667 49.2860985944 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.0 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4545454545 21.698381199 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369985721069 0.272083759551 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156255403746 0.0996497079465 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807111748214 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.369985721069 0.162205337803 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.3589403974 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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