At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.please help me refine my essay.

I disagree with allocate equal budget to all parts of the universities and college such as sport and social activities similar to classes and libraries. In my opinion the most important issue in an academic places which people go to improve their knowledge and prepare to future career is providing those goal's requirements.
First, university and college play a important role in people's life which, affect all aspects of their life specially future career and financial matters. When a person inter a university and study a major they should to study hard and learn good courses to reach their goals so a universities with high facilities help them to reach their goal sooner.
Second, sometimes students need to use more resources for an specific courses Since all student haven't enough moneys to buy additional book, DVD, CD and other study resources they can borrow them of library. An universities and college with good since sources and equipment can help students to improve their abilities. Although sports and social activities such as: art group, music instrument playing, participate in football or basketball team are useful for students and help them to conserve their physical, emotional and psychological health but the first priority is study.
Finally, students can have these activities in another places with own financial and let universes to improve academic Facilities. For instance last i studied in an university where have few sports and other by-side facilities instead have high level academic feasibility and good library sources. Some students decided to sport for mind relaxation on the other hand they didn't want to go pool in common people shift so they collect moneys and rent an afternoon shift of a pool near university four days each weak. They could have good sports activities on the other hand a high academic facilities.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 83, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll parts of the universities and college such as sport and social activities simi...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ts. First, university and college play a important role in peoples life which, a...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...rn good courses to reach their goals so a universities with high facilities help ...
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Line 2, column 279, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a university' or simply 'universities'?
Suggestion: a university; universities
...rn good courses to reach their goals so a universities with high facilities help them to reach...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...students need to use more resources for an specific courses Since all student have...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...r an specific courses Since all student havent enough moneys to buy additional book, D...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... academic Facilities. For instance last i studied in an university where have few...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ilities. For instance last i studied in an university where have few sports and ot...
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Line 4, column 373, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: didn't
... mind relaxation on the other hand they didnt want to go pool in common people shift ...
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Line 4, column 589, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'facility'?
Suggestion: facility
...ities on the other hand a high academic facilities.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'for instance', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.303405572755 0.261695866417 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.123839009288 0.158904122519 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.139318885449 0.0723426182421 193% => Less adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0185758513932 0.0435111971325 43% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0495356037152 0.0277247811725 179% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0866873065015 0.128828473217 67% => OK
Participles: 0.0061919504644 0.0370669169778 17% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.65055625204 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0433436532508 0.0208969081088 207% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.077399380805 0.128158765124 60% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015479876161 0.0158828679856 97% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0123839009288 0.0114777025283 108% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1866.0 1645.83664459 113% => OK
No of words: 302.0 271.125827815 111% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17880794702 6.08160592843 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384105960265 0.374372842146 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288079470199 0.287516216867 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205298013245 0.187439937562 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132450331126 0.113142543107 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65055625204 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549668874172 0.539623497131 102% => OK
Word variations: 57.2978338774 53.8517498576 106% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0529801325 84% => OK
Sentence length: 27.4545454545 21.7502111507 126% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4978903403 49.3711431718 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.636363636 132.220823453 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4545454545 21.7502111507 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.909090909091 0.878197800319 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 3.39072847682 295% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 56.2624924744 50.5018328374 111% => OK
Elegance: 2.06451612903 1.90840788429 108% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321500531467 0.549887131256 58% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144284989909 0.142949733639 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0479594853565 0.0787303798458 61% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.618153910483 0.631733273073 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0799862609572 0.139662658121 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158467427592 0.266732575781 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100347305629 0.103435571967 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.338331157095 0.414875509568 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0263689021604 0.0530846634433 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231963969657 0.40443939384 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599786049633 0.0528353158467 114% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.26048565121 23% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 3.49668874172 200% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.2958057395 78% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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