Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

How is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

Somebody thinks sport is a good way. We can easy made friend with many people in the foot ball match, or tennis match.

Nowadays, with the development of internet we can connect with everybody in the world and internet is a good way, too.

And some people say that music is a good way to make friend. Depend your hobby or feeling, you can like the many type of music. Something you like listening to jazz, blue, country or EDM music. When you on the bus or in the supermarket, you listen the song that you like and see the neighbor dancing with the song you know that they like it. Then you feel them friendly and approachable. Sometime two different people listen to the same song that they love, they easy to talk with together or sometime they just smile. I think with music we become friendly and gentler and happy person. In everywhere, when music is played, every man or woman, young or all or different languages and cultures can dancing or sing along to the music. You may are the Vietnamese and don’t know English or Spanish but you still can dance with “ Ring the bell” song or “ Lambada ” song. You may was born in 2001 but you easy happy when you listen to the Abba’ song or dance with Michael Jackson’ hit.

After all, music is really important, our life will so boring if we don’t have music and music is good way for we make a friend with everybody.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
How is a good way of bringing people of ...
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Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun type seems to be countable; consider using: 'many types'.
Suggestion: many types
...your hobby or feeling, you can like the many type of music. Something you like listening ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with ' Ring the bell' song or ' Lambada ' song. You may was ...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'bore'
Suggestion: bore
...c is really important, our life will so boring if we don't have music and music i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, really, so, still, then, after all, i think, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1224.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51660516605 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32533231639 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50184501845 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 372.6 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5453929428 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31526827312 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133569431027 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118419656375 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21646376306 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138869497984 0.056905535591 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.58950901804 77% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 78.4519038076 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.33 Out of 6
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