Everyone look forward to living in a good as well as a prosperous neighborhood, where there is a variaty in the business fields. Therefore, if a new movie theatre is to be open in my neighborhood , I would be extremely happy and excited. The basis of my view is based on the following reasons.
First of all, the opening of a new movie theater, would promote a new and distict place for people to enjoy their outings. A movie theater is always a fun place to go to, and to enjoy watching a movie with family, friends and beloved ones. Moreover, it is an interesting place for all age groups; kids,...
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Sentence: Everyone look forward to living in a good as well as a prosperous neighborhood, where there is a variaty in the business fields.
Error: variaty Suggestion: variety
Sentence: First of all, the opening of a new movie theater, would promote a new and distict place for people to enjoy their outings.
Error: distict Suggestion: distinct
Sentence: A movie theater would mean a good number of emplyees would be needed to work in the theater.
Error: emplyees Suggestion: employees
Sentence: Some are needed for selling the tickets, others are needed for selling snackes or for leading the audience to the show rooms.
Error: snackes Suggestion: snakes
Sentence: In addition to this, it would escalate vrious job opportunities in the area.
Error: vrious Suggestion: various
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