Some people think that human needs for farmland,housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?Why why not?

As much as we should be concerned about animals. In my opinion, I think we should pay meticulous attention to human beings needs in the first place therefore we should make sure that human beings are competent regarding food ,housing and industry. The basis of my view are based on many reasons.

First of all,human beings are the most intelligent creatures in the world. Can you imagine a world that is totally deprived from humanity? What would this world be like? There would be definitely no meaning or goals to be achieved. Human beings are considered to be the most intelligent creatures in this world. Due to their intelligence, and through their experiments, invetions and innovation, the world had reached to what it is today.

Secondly,human beings are totally aware of the exact reason why they are born. They appreciate the world and the creator of this world. They know there is God and that they should be living accordingly. They differenciate between the right and the wrong. They presumably should be living to please God, to help the poor and the needy people, to take care of each other, to defend each other and to create a fascinating explinded world as much as they can.

Finally, we can not neglect the fact that human beings are the controlling factor in this world. They think, they tackle, they build, they invent, they cure, they teach, they create a history , a society, a civilization as well. Hence, protecting them and supplying them with all their needs to maintain a sustainable living are the least of their rights.

In conclusion, for the above mentioned reasons, i think that it is essencial to secure human beings needs beforehand, and if these needs are secured then we can start thinking of ways to secure animals and save lands for endangered ones.

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Sentence: In conclusion, for the above mentioned reasons, i think that it is essencial to secure human beings needs beforehand, and if these needs are secured then we can start thinking of ways to secure animals and save lands for endangered ones.
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