TPO 54
The lecturer disagrees with the ideas in the reading by talking about the disadvantages of the three solutions to the high salt level in the Salton Sea presents in the reading passage.
First, while the reading passage suggests that directly remove salt from the lake's water through special desalination facilities would be a way to restore the lake's overall health, the speaker disagrees with this idea for the reason that it is likely to present serious problems by damaging the health of people living nearby. The materials dissolved in the water can include salt and other harmful chemicals. When these chemicals are solidified through these special facilities, the wind could spread them in the air and therefore people are exposed to the danger of inhaling toxins from the air.
The second solution given by the reading passage is using the sea water from the Pacific Ocean to dilute the salt level in the lake, since water in the Ocean is 20 percent less salty than water in the lake. However, the speaker deny the feasibility of this plan for its unaffordable cost. The Pacific Ocean and the lake are 100 km apart, thus pipelines or canals are requires to transport water into the lake. The construction of pipelines/canals is expensive and the speaker doubt if the local government would have the ability to pay for such a huge amount of money.
Thirdly, the reading passage suggest that the lake's salinity can be reduced by constructing walls to divide the lake into sections. The salinity of main sections would decrease as a result of the flowing freshwater from nearby rivers that would pass through them. However, the speaker points out that this strategy would only work for a short period of time because the region where the Salton Sea is located has very intense geological activity such as earthquakes, which are likely to destroy the walls. Once the walls collapse, the water from smalls sections which has high salinity level would be mixed with the water that has low salinity level.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'transporting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: transporting
..., thus pipelines or canals are requires to transport water into the lake. The construction o...
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Line 5, column 568, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y to pay for such a huge amount of money Thirdly, the reading passage suggest tha...
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Line 7, column 47, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...y, the reading passage suggest that the lakes salinity can be reduced by constructing...
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Line 7, column 344, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...is strategy would only work for a short period of time because the region where the Salton Sea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, such as, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 340.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92352941176 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4517418425 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520588235294 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.0056346548 49.2860985944 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.181818182 110.228320801 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9090909091 21.698381199 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.72727272727 7.06452816374 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.3589403974 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 53.8541721854 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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