The following appeared in an article written by
Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist,
visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his
observations that children in Tertia were reared by
an entire village rather than by their own biological
parents. However, my recent interviews with
children living in the group of islands that includes
Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than
about other adults in the village. This research of
mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about
Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the
observation-centered approach to studying cultures
is invalid as well. The interview-centered method
that my team of graduate students is currently
using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate
understanding of child-rearing traditions there and
in other island cultures.”
The specific evidence needed to evaluate the argument made is the which clarifies whether the children of Tertia are reared by entire village or just by their biological parents.
If the evidence clearly says that children in Tertia are raised by entire village, then Dr. Karp argument is invalid. He says as these children speak much more time about their biological parents, they are raised by their biological parents. But, this conclusion might be fallacious. Talking more about biological parents doesn’t necessarily guarantee that these children are reared by only their biological parents. It is also probable that though reared by entire village, these children may tend to observe their parents, love them and talk more about them. The case can also be like these children intentionally talk less about other adults, to avoid them giving offences. Nevertheless, to generalising that observation–centered method works better than interview-centered method based on just one such example is a moot point.
Though having said above, if the evidence indicates that these children are reared by only their biological parents, Dr. Field conclusion is obviously invalid. The evidence can be even from Dr. Field’s student’s studies provided if they are disinterested. It also reflects that interactions works better in understanding traditions and cultures rather than just observations. Such an example strengthens the argument made by Dr. Karp.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 225 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
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samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 225 350
No. of Characters: 1200 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.873 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.333 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.789 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.098 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.397 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nevertheless, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 55.5748502994 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1246.0 2260.96107784 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 223.0 441.139720559 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58744394619 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.56307096286 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14587974209 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 204.123752495 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533632286996 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 705.55239521 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0163524757 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.833333333 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153196179171 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664768554472 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576027868205 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127339034052 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303487956592 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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