“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
Some people think that success depends to be diligent and chance has no effect on the success. I do not agree with their thought because chance has a big role to be successful. In my personal opinion, there are two main reasons behind the success which I am going to discuss in this essay.
To begin with, success is the thing which we can not achieve without hard working. If someone really wants to be successful at any subject he should expend effort to deserve success. For instance, if I want to study abroad I need to get some scores from exams but if I do not work hard for my exams getting enough scores will be just a nonsensical dream. I really need to be diligent for my goals. Moreover, there is no person succed without hard work. If you read the stories behind all successful people you will notice that they all work hard and failed too many times but they choosed to work harder instead of give up.
Secondly, there always another reason behind the success we call word luck for this backstage hero. Luck is the one of the thing that which we can not control in anyway. For example, everyone knows the inventor of the practical incandescent electric light bulb and we all read the story behind this invention. he tries more than six thousand material as a filament but he fails this failures encourages him, after another failure he notices his button of jacket had unraveled and saw yarn then he decides the use this yarn as a filament this time he succeed to run light bulb up to one thousand and two hundred hours. Just imagine if Edison did not notice the his button unraveled he could not find the true material for light bulb filament. He worked hard but he strike it lucky.Luck was the bakstage hero of his success.
In conclusion I strongly believe that luck and hard work two things that which completes each other perfectly.If you work hard and also you are lucky you always be successful at any subject. But if you do not have luck even you work hard there something could went wrong. Finally, I believe that you could work hard for something but you can not succeed without luck.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...and material as a filament but he fails this failures encourages him, after another ...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...se this yarn as a filament this time he succeed to run light bulb up to one thousand an...
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...at which completes each other perfectly.If you work hard and also you are lucky y...
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....If you work hard and also you are lucky you always be successful at any subject....
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
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...u work hard and also you are lucky you always be successful at any subject. But if you d...
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...ven you work hard there something could went wrong. Finally, I believe that you coul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, finally, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52083333333 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26607245342 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502604166667 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8554500638 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4444444444 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229773137878 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841559331451 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635482650525 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15591384697 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613960519764 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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