Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
That nowadays children profoundly is a principal factor for each society. It is a highly debatable point whether busy parents spend the time to have fun playing or to schoolwork. Some people strongly believe that parents have to use their spare time to do children's schoolwork to improve children's knowledge. Nevertheless, I believe that parents should use their time for games or sports. The following reasons would elaborate on the thesis.
First of all, one of the compelling reasons that authenticate the thesis is that have a fun time with parents play a key role in both children physical-health and mental-health. It would not be too great an exaggeration to say that nowadays, due to inactivity life, many students have some physical and mental issues in their life. As a matter of fact, children face many problems in school with their assignments and friends. For example, my brother study in a very famous school in our city which is pioneers in some aspects. In fact, my brother and their friends have to study in the same position for a long time with huge pressure from their teacher. My parents in order to decrease these issues spend a lot of time with my brother to have a fun time for at least one day.
In addition, children need to learn how they can communicate with other people. To clarify, parents have a direct influence on their children communication ability. Broadly speaking, since some children are shy and they do not like to make friends with other children, if parents can not learn their children to interact with other people, children will not able to have a successful social life in the future. For instance, my uncles did not spend the time to talk with her children to learn how they can communicate with respect to other people so that her sons are so impolite when they want to speak with other people. As a result, nobody likes to work and speak with my cousins.
In conclusion, although there are many who believe that parents have to spend free time with their children just for schoolwork. I disagree. I strongly believe that parents have to support their children with spending time playing game or sport in order to help their children to have a healthy life and successful future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, nevertheless, so, then, at least, broadly speaking, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78552971576 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59878702901 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459948320413 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.284595394 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.888888889 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5555555556 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.484047382153 0.236089414692 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16430894023 0.076458572812 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132117565779 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343146098696 0.150856017488 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104594019473 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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