Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Some believe that it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero because they think that the reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished. From my prospective, the claim is a little arbitrary and the reason cannot stand totally true.
There are some celebrities who used to be estimable persons in heart of the public being caught doing something bad or even committing a crime. therefore, their reputation is eventually ruined because of the inconformity between what the society used to hold how they are like and the real faces of them. people may draw a conclusion that everyone would be the same, which I think may not be correct. In my opinion, there are plenty of man and woman who may not be famous in our society are always capable to stand with good reputation in the people around them. if one chooses not to do the wrong thing in life, his or her reputation would never be ruined no matter how careful the media scrutiny is.
Furthermore, hero is not defined as not doing one wrong thing in his or her life. they may be caught by the media and their mistakes may be spread to everyone in our society. however, some of them would remain to be a hero after the society finds some shortcomings on him or her because those would never offset what makes them a hero. Take LeBron james as an example, he is an American professional basketball player who currently plays for the Los Angeles Lakers of the national basketball Association. Commonly nicknamed "King james" and "The Chosen one", james was highly promoted in the national media as a future nba star while still in high school, and was named Ohio's "Mr. basketball" three times. however, he was found to say some words related to racial discrimination and some people may worry about his reputation. he apologized afterward immediately and said that he did not mean it. Today our society still regard him as a hero in basketball field or even one of the greatest basketball players in the whole nba history.
To sum up, the nature of our society consists of open-minded and forgiving. In the 19th century, three great classical theories of social and historical change were created: the sociocultural evolutionism, the social cycle theory and the Marxist historical materialism theory. those theories had one common factor: they all agreed that the history of humanity is pursuing a certain fixed path, most likely that of the social identity. therefore, it still stands a chance for the living man or woman to become a hero due to his or her contribution to the progress of our society. The reputation would never be diminished if only several small mistakes are made or some shortcomings of one are revealed. No man is perfect after all.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore
...mething bad or even committing a crime. therefore, their reputation is eventually ruined ...
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...ey are like and the real faces of them. people may draw a conclusion that everyone wou...
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Suggestion: the surrounding people
...apable to stand with good reputation in the people around them. if one chooses not to do the wrong thi...
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...d reputation in the people around them. if one chooses not to do the wrong thing i...
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Suggestion: They
...ing one wrong thing in his or her life. they may be caught by the media and their mi...
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Suggestion: However
...y be spread to everyone in our society. however, some of them would remain to be a hero...
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...'Mr. basketball' three times. however, he was found to say some words related...
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... people may worry about his reputation. he apologized afterward immediately and sa...
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... Marxist historical materialism theory. those theories had one common factor: they al...
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...ost likely that of the social identity. therefore, it still stands a chance for the livin...
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Suggestion:
...vealed. No man is perfect after all.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, after all, i think, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82098765432 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72748636402 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495884773663 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2949381753 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.571428571 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101991656802 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335616529289 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373437993733 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688307426075 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249425467527 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.