OG1 - Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
It goes without saying that in this progressive and complicated world in which we are living, being independence free people to deliberately choose what they want and opt for their desired lifestyle. In this regard, young people always concern whether to live their parents as early as possible or stay longer with them. Personally speaking, I prefer to live with my family for a longer time, and the reasons to substantiate my notions are elaborated upon hereunder.
Firstly, the longer an individual lives with his family, the less financial problems he will face in his life. Young adults need to have time and support to take some risks in order to set up their own businesses. As long as one has the support of and reliance on family wealth, he feels freer to act as he wishes without the fear of loss and financial failure. For example, ten years ago, my ambitious eighteen-year-old brother separated from us, seeking his independence, declaring that we would never need his parent financial support since he was an independent person. He was a talented person and smart enough to set up his private business; however, he failed in his first attempt to start his own job; moreover, he lost almost everything he has saved, and had no one to financially support him. Finally, with no reliance upon his family, he forced to start working in a restaurant as a delivery service,
and lost all his dreams.
Secondly, while the young generation tends to study for higher education, they need more time to dedicate to their research and spend less time doing home affairs like dusting, cooking, sweeping and washing the dishes. To make it clear, when a university student decides to live independently, he is responsible for doing all the tasks and duties related to his home. While there is a wide range of tasks to be done and doing each of them needs spending lots of time, the less time is available for him to do his assignments and research. In contrast, those who live with their family can divide the duties with others and work less in the home. A personal example can drive this notion home. Ten years ago, when I was a university student, I had a classmate who rented a flat in Tehran, the capital of Iran, to feel more liberty and live independently. Although he was a smart student, he always had difficulties cooking meals, washing the dishes, sweeping the floor, and maintaining other facilities. Therefore, he had less time to study his lessons compared to me who had many less daily tasks in my parents home. Finally, I had a better performance at the university and got a higher GPA in comparison with his.
In conclusion, although some young adult prefers to leave their family sooner to catch their independent lives, I believe that living longer with family is more beneficial since there will be more financial support from the parents, and also, more time is released through dividing home duties among all the family members.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81139489194 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66101443714 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504911591356 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.1939616522 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.894736842 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7894736842 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278282003014 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093067892604 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082577151599 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165758737074 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109058210329 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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