These days too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine rather than by following a healthy lifestyle To what extent do you agree with this statement

Essay topics:

These days, too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than by following a healthy lifestyle. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays, it is widely believed that the role of medicine and doctor is more important than a balanced lifestyle for the achievement of a healthy life. Even though a significant number of people follow a healthy lifestyle, I think that the majority of the population trust more the medicine and the doctors for the pursuit of a good life.

On the one hand, in the last years, many new typologies of medicine growth in popularity, especially homeopathic ones. Suggesting the use of these new kinds of medicinals, many doctors thaught their patients that many important and severe diseases can be solved quickly, without possibly longer and expansive treatments. For instance, trusting his doctor, a friend of mine believed that he could have stopped suffering from asthma, thanks to homeopathic medicinal. Nothing, however, has changed since it started this therapy.

On the second hand, surfing the internet, a high number of people find out the existence of vast amounts of medicine assuring to heal any kind of pain that a human can suffer from, such as cold, back pain, heart pain and so on. A significant percentage of them trusted these websites, with the hope that the given medicinal can rapidly solve their problems. though, many of them did not consider that their issues can not disappear using not-authorized medicinal and a serious doctor should have been addressed. Recently, my aunt suffered a lot from a long cold and decided to purchase a pills box for that kind of deases instead of going to the nearest hospital.

To conclude, I firmly believe that the number of people choosing to rely on medicine and doctor far outnumbers the fraction that follows a healthy lifestyle.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, for instance, i think, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 5.60731707317 464% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 965.302439024 147% => OK
No of words: 282.0 196.424390244 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03191489362 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70205552667 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 106.607317073 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 283.868780488 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0354042042 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6363636364 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.23603664747 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185619269279 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731281611891 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550568978666 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128051665524 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429352339345 0.0819641961636 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 40.7170731707 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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