Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
humankind has destroyed the environment for decades mostly for economic purposes. The air, the water, the soil is polluted, wild animals do not have enough suitable environment to survive and getting vanished more and more, the ecosystem is broken. people think it is worth to sacrifice. As a result, all of us are getting back the negative consequences from the environment. our life today is damaged by ourself and we kill the future of our next generation for materialistic extravagance needs. it is time to put the environment above the economic gain in most places in the world. thus, the statement points out the necessary solution to save the nature, to save our humankind. The left wilderness areas should be preserved by laws and only government has such power to create that laws and to make people obey.
In most places on the world, people treat the economic gain as the main goal because of their high greediness toward materials. The greedy nature of humankind leads people want to own more and more assets even they do not really need it. our earth is devastated by human’s avarice. thus, perverting the remaining wildlife in those places by laws becomes an exigency. However, there are some exceptional places in the world such as in Africa that requires the balance between preserving the wilderness areas and growing economic gain for basis needs. African is not capable to utilize their resources properly to supply their basis needs. they are still the victim of poverty, clean water paucity. we need several experts at the field of environment and economic working together to figure out the effective way to satisfy people’s basic needs meanwhile does not hurt the environment.
there are a very common mistaken perception that economic gain always has to damage the environment as a cost. In contrast, as long as we consider the environment as a center, there are several exceptional creations that boot the economic development while our environment is protected. The sustainable development has become more and more popular. Organic agriculture method prevents the damage to soil and water by not using pesticides. Wood straw campaign is going to spread all over the world where hundred of companies join in to avoid a ton of plastic of straws released to the environment. that is a good signal for all of us. Moreover, green tourism helps states make money from tourists while the wilderness areas are still preserved. environment protection must be considered as a priority factor of every economic project.
In conclusion, the environment saving is in emergency call, in which the remaining wilderness areas preservation requires serious action from governments, institutions as well as all of us as a humankind. hurting the environment for economic purpose can not be acceptable.
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humankind has destroyed the environment for decad...
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...c purposes. The air, the water, the soil is polluted, wild animals do not have en...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, really, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16702819957 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85839973376 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520607375271 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7976254898 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6153846154 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7307692308 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208392443596 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547338408535 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545848932334 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140252192842 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225327741917 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.