Some people think that children became less creative than they were in the past due to the effects of technology. However, in my opinion, children get more advantages from technology and it allows them to be more creative than before.
To begin with, the development of technology enables children to widen their perspectives because it removes the restrictions of travel and offers a bunch of chances to experience entirely new worlds. Without innovative development in transportation technology, it wouldn't be possible for children to be exposed to new cultures and various customs that are valuable assets for them to adapt to modern society. Think about the old period when people were riding horses or wagons. Traveling around was a big deal and an event so that it seemed to be dangerous and arduous work to be seldom done by those who had higher social status. Also, little kids were not capable of doing it. So to speak, people in the past time rarely moved their regions thinking that the places they exist in were the world itself. For example, the Chinese thought they were the only people living and existing in the world. Because of this belief, they were vulnerable to be intruded by the western world. But now, people can think perceptively by escaping narrow thoughts while traveling. Children, these days, can travel around as long as they have permissions from their parents or companies who are accompanied, and this travel can function as an important asset of their lives.
On top of that children are beneficiaries of numerous tools and equipment that are newly introduced. By using these, they can be more artistic which lets them widely spread out their creativity and imagination. For instance, there is a pen called a color-picker pen that you can pick whatever color you want and become usable with picked color. Children now in art classes make use of this pen to select shades and pigments whatever they want and need. This tool gets rid of the limitations only choosing colors already existed and encourages children to make their own colors. Another example of this would be a tablet which is a device specialized for painting. Children are getting free from the tedious process such as bringing all ingredients and conserving their works at physical places. They simply go wherever they want to draw with this small and light device and make a bunch of pieces. Moreover, they can post online to show their works and share ideas from peers which is helpful activities to develop their ideas and imaginative souls.
To sum up, children nowadays enjoy the benefits of technology to enhance the spectrum of experiences and artistic skills. Although some people still against this idea, I strongly believe that technology's advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
- TOEFL T P O 5 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Cars have made a greater impact on society than airplanes. 70
- Do you agree or disagree? people benefit from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. 90
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...opment in transportation technology, it wouldnt be possible for children to be exposed ...
Line 3, column 708, Rule ID: PAST_TIME
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
...of doing it. So to speak, people in the past time rarely moved their regions thinking tha...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, so to speak, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2334.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03017241379 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62694565796 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566810344828 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.352702076 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.47826087 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1739130435 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.60869565217 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320848745117 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905003253732 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791087377133 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210029404147 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108196444956 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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