"Excellence could be achieved only by competition." Do you agree with the statement or not? Give reasons and examples for your arguments.
No doubt, competition plays a vital role to make a person excellent. If we look at scenario then we will see that either it is school education or job scenario, everywhere competition spurred the person to perform the best in all. I strongly support the statement that competition is the only source of excellency. I believe that there is a myriad of ways competition makes people change their thought process to give their best.
To begin with, the most efficient way to attain excellence is to make people feel motivated towards their goal. Definitely, Competition does this beautifully. I have a wonderful example of my life. When I was in school, I used to be lazy. In fact, I never put effort to do well in class.I had a mindset that being a mediocre student is ok. One day, my class teacher organized a competition that the student, who will achieve the best grades in science and maths will get three thousand Indian rupees money in the prize. First time I took anything so seriously. I really wanted to win that prize. I did hard work as well as I got myself to engage in study. As a result, I won that prize. Moreover, that competition worked like a catalyst in my life and inspired me to be a brilliant student at least in maths and science.
Furthermore, another major advantage of competition is “ being involved”. In general, when say involved means “ with whole heart and mind “ This is crucial to achieving anything. It's our human nature to get distracted or not paying attention to anything completely. For example, one of my friends was working on research experiments related to bioreactor. It's been one years she did not produce good results. The same year she took participation in a research poster competition at an international conference. Although she performs well however another student got the award for the best poster presentation. After this competition, she produces the best data on her research and everyone in that lab was witnessed for this excellence achievement. Next year she got the “ best paper award” for her work.
To wrap up, competition makes a person feel motivated to compete with the crowd and achieve “ the best”. Likewise people get involved in their work with full attention. I feel that these two characteristics are crucial to make a person excellent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, likewise, look, moreover, really, so, then, well, at least, for example, i feel, in fact, in general, no doubt, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9175 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9003782081 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4925125885 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.8518518519 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8148148148 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109225643569 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284230417661 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280597233244 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062735155416 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160377942118 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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