"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to the Mozart School's Web site, the author has claimed that the Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents in case of enrolling their children in music lessons. To establish this claim, the author has given some evidences like no need of audition, wide range of teaching of different styles and genres, availability of distinguished musicians in the faculty and graduates becoming well-known and highly paid. But these evidences are limited and there are mainly following three unstated assumptions, which are flawed, which are responsible to question the reliability of the conclusion.
The author has assumed that when any music school is all-encompassing like including youngsters of all ability and age levels and no need of audition to attend the school, then it will be the most popular among the people. But in those music school, perhaps, where there is no need of audition and any competition to enter, parents of talented and highly deserved students will not admit their off-springs in the fear of not getting proper environment to learn for their children. Besides being the popular among the parents, there is the possibility of becoming as one of the bad music school amongst the parents. So, it can seriously weaken the author's claim.
Secondly, the author has implied that any music school which gives instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well as wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock, will encompass all of the parents and their children needs and desires. But the case might be different. Parents rather might prefer specialized music class for their children because they might not trust on this "comprehensive and all-encompassing" music class and also their children can be in need of specialized music coaching.
Thirdly, the author has assumed that some of the most distinguished musicians will surely teach better to their children. But being skilled and distinguished in certain field does ensure that he/she will teach well ? Teaching is a different process which is augmented and bolstered through talents and experience. Those teachers might not teach well. Due to which, parents do not prefer to send their children in the school.
In these different ways, the conclusion does not hold water. There are many evidences which are yet to be found and analyzed to draw more reliable conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1951 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.618 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: WEB_SITE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
According to the Mozart Schools Web site, the author has claimed that the Mozart...
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Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this music' or 'those musics'?
Suggestion: this music; those musics
...e most popular among the people. But in those music school, perhaps, where there is no need...
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Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...author has implied that any music school which gives instruction in nearly all mu...
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Line 5, column 197, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... from classical to rock, will encompass all of the parents and their children needs and de...
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Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and all-encompassing' music class and also their children can be in need o...
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Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Thirdly, the author has assumed that some of the most distinguished musicians...
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Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... Thirdly, the author has assumed that some of the most distinguished musicians will surel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19638242894 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85830203623 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480620155039 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9855227416 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.294117647 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357998495536 0.218282227539 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104670776557 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13796485628 0.0701772020484 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183052754091 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120015989349 0.0628817314937 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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