An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The statement is covering the issue of vitamin A deficiency among the population of Tagus, which was addressed by an international development organization that proposed a new breed of millet with increased quantity of the lacking vitamin to be introduced in the country. While it is argued that the solution is likely to be well received by the citizens and eventually prove effective, the data provided is not enough to ensure the strength of such assertion. In fact, there are three assumptions that lack evidence to support them.
First of all, the argument is based on the assumption that the new type of millet will solve the problem of vitamin A deficiency among the population. This may actually be wrong, as no information is given on any relevant research that could prove that consumption of new millet will increase vitamin A levels. In fact, vitamin perception by human organism depends largely on the accompanying vitamins that are being receiving with food. Some vitamins simply cannot be absorbed if the food contains other element that negate the effect of those vitamins. Thus, consumption of new type of millet does not necessarily ensure improved A vitamin levels, especially if it constitutes other elements preventing a proper digestion of vitamin A.
Secondly, the argument plays on the assumption that the government of Tagus will be in favor of the idea to subsidize farmers, since the seeds of the new millet are more expensive than those of the traditional type. If the authorities actually object to provide financial resources to support the production of new millet, then it would be hard to implement the idea at all, unless the international development organization finds other sources of funding.
Finally, one should not forget about the farmers who may be opposed to the suggestion due to several reasons. Without a guarantee of being subsidized, a farmer is unlikely to adopt the idea since, given higher costs of the mew seeds, it would mean running a risk of disrupting personal financial stability. Moreover, farmers may find it more difficult to deal with new type of millet if in general there are higher costs corresponding to their cultivation. If this is the case, then once again the suggestion that governments have to promote new type of millet will be a wrong advise that would probably lead to a conflict between the farmers and the authorities of Tagus.
Overall, although the proposition seems to have good intentions, more factors have to be taken into consideration before moving on with the decision.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2096 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.967 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.816 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.609 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 535, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ons that lack evidence to support them. First of all, the argument is based on t...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A level' or simply 'levels'?
Suggestion: A level; Levels
...ion of new millet will increase vitamin A levels. In fact, vitamin perception by human o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, in fact, in general, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2157.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11137440758 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87044596363 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516587677725 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.5517431541 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.8 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1333333333 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 5.70786347227 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449055728528 0.218282227539 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144395160514 0.0743258471296 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969329128447 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219527692337 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967092408931 0.0628817314937 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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