Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is very essential for a person in the age of productivity to be employment. And in the circumstances of the era that we live in. I believe that if a person gets the chance to have a job, he should take it immediately, whether he satisfies about it or not. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, there is a shortage of jobs opportunity all around the world; finding a job nowadays is not as easy as it used to be decades ago. The ratio of unemployment is increasing in every country in the world. Also, there are high numbers of highly qualified individuals in different fields who are seeking limited jobs, therefore, the competition among these individuals is very critical. For example, three years ago I applied for a research assistant position at my university, and I thought that my qualifications are above the requirements of that position, but when I nominated for the interview stage I was surprised by the huge number of candidates who applied for the same position. So, it is very hard and competitive to find a job these days.
Secondly, it is very important for any person to have a stable and secure source of income in order to maintain the basic needs of life. And being employed, regardless of the type of job, is a good means to satisfy these needs. For instance, a friend of mine graduated from the engineering school one year ago and during this year he did not find a job related to his discipline, as a result, he looked for a job out of his academic background and worked as a salesperson in a supermarket. By doing that, he was able to pay his apartments's bill, transportation cost, and feeding himself. Even if he is not comforted with this job's conditions, he is able to meet the basic needs for his life.
To conclude, it becomes more difficult to find a job in the present, therefore having a secure job is very important. This is because of the low numbers of jobs that are available, and the importance to have a secure and stable source of income.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 622, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...mself. Even if he is not comforted with this jobs conditions, he is able to meet the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55826558266 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86376143301 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523035230352 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9967058425 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.125 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0625 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215903609471 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724423082938 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515713873371 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142242185994 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326032441328 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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