Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The art and the role of the government in flurishing of the art has always been a controversial issue. While some people reckon the goverment should fund the art to ensure the art expanding, some claim that intervene the government could destroy the spirit of the art. I could not be agree with the statement as it is because the satement generalized the situation for which seems it could not be reasonable.
The funding of the art could help the art to provide better condition for enthusastics like teenagers and adults but I believe it could not assure the success of the art due to the other paramenters that are involved. For example, providing approporiate art teachers may not achiveable by money if there is not enough fundation for that in long time period. This process should be follow for long time to provide good condition to hire suitable teachers. So, educational support by universities and institutes may play critical role in this path.
Providing art for all peolpe is another part of statement that could not assure just by funding. In many families, parents preclude the children to follow the art for their professional careers even all the situations would be ready. Also, peers make a mental tendency for pupil to follow engineering, laws or other fields that support the future life of the students.
Although funding the government in the art could ease the conditions for advocates fo pursue the art, some maintain that intervening the government in the art could destroy the spirit of the art. The believe this funding tend the artists to follow the government guidelines and support it which may destroy the whole goal of the art. This trend could be worsen in the undemocratic society. For example, the government may pay money to some movie makers to produce some films that shows the behaviour of the government are reliable and dupe their people.
In conclusion, although funding the art by the government could help to flurish the art, in fact there is not any necessity for that and even it could deteriorate the spirit of the art due to pressuring its policy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
The art and the role of the government in flurishing of the art ...
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Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'followed'?
Suggestion: followed
...ong time period. This process should be follow for long time to provide good condition...
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...rt could destroy the spirit of the art. The believe this funding tend the artists to follow...
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Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...ould destroy the spirit of the art. The believe this funding tend the artists to follow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86629526462 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66723237405 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456824512535 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 537.3 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0831330864 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.466666667 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38983105378 0.243740707755 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151991123414 0.0831039109588 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120542789397 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255238001597 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101702224841 0.0667264976115 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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