Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Living in the hectic lives has changed human beings' lives in so many aspects and Parent, which are busy with work and community do not have enough time for family members as much as they should. Indeed, parent face an intricate dilemma so as whether they should play with kid or help them with their homework in the limited time that they have for family. I, personally, take the view that it would be more beneficial either for parents or children if parents that time to assist kid in their lessons.
To begin with, helping children with schoolwork is necessary in today's era, since lessons are more complicated. To be more specific, in today's educational centers teachers face a plethora of issues which prohibit them to be able teach student with a great quality; problems such as huge number of student in a class, less educational facilities, and difficult topics, to name but a few, lead tutors to expect parents to assist children in their assignment. Indeed, should parent not dedicate enough time for kids’ schoolwork, they will face drastic problem and the quality of education will be deteriorated considerably. In other words, family member plays a vital role in student, more specifically early age kids, education and their neglect in fulfilling kids need to support in lessons may cause some irreparable hurt on their educational record.
Secondly, parents support in schoolwork assist children to land on their dream job. To clarify more, skimming on every single job announcement, we can see good educational background as a crucial qualification items for applicant. In fact, every single employer in today's era hold the conviction that student who got the good result in the school would help them to achieve the company goals in an efficient manner. In these circumstances, it is crucial for parents to dedicate as much time as they can to boost their kids educational scores. My personal experience would help to put a vivid picture of this idea. Last year when I was looking for a job, I applied for the job which I am occupied with right now, among dozens of people who were applied for the position the managers picked me. After the official start of working in the complex, I asked for the reasons of choosing me with related experience among the all applicants, they told me that my excellent grades help me to stand out from the crowd. if fact, had I not had scores that draw the attention of the admission committee, I would not have been able to get the job.
Taking all the aforementioned into account, it can be concluded that it would be more beneficial if parent dedicate all the free time that the have to assist children with school stuff. To replicate the reasons, it will help kids to accomplish school’s difficult assignments and it can have positive influence on their future opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient manner" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... help them to achieve the company goals in an efficient manner. In these circumstances, it is crucial ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...es help me to stand out from the crowd. if fact, had I not had scores that draw th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2356.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86776859504 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67730330905 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514462809917 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.9416874837 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.588235294 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4705882353 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191802487788 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687921207741 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514519522225 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135346012331 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056665500785 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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