Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this new modern era, education is an inevitable part of our life. People, specifically children, need to learn every day. If someone do not learn something, he would be considered as a legged person. Colleges and universities are the two most important places for learning because these are the places which have the standard infrastructures for educating. The subjects which must be learnt in these didactic sites are controversial today. A group of parents believe that these places are established just for teaching mathematic, physics and other scientific subjects nd students should only study there. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that students should do additional actions, such as athletic and art activities. I personally contend that the latter and believe that colleges and universities are not just places for study. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that doing extracurricular actions is good for their health. New researches state that when someone have mental and physical health, he would be a successful person in his whole life. Mental health will attain by doing artistic actions such as playing an instrument, play a role in theater, etc. Physical health will achieve by doing sport exercises such as body building, yoga, etc. For instance, I have two nephews who are twins. One of them who named Ali is a person who just studies and studies. He always reads books and the college's library is his favorite place. Although his grades is always good, he has severe depression and he has serious problems to make a relation with his classmates. However, another brother named Reza has normal scores. He plays in the college baseball team as a captain. He has several friends and has both mental and physical health.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that life is not physics and mathematics. I mean, when we go to a college or university, we have to learn some life skills because after graduation we must go to live in a normal society not an academic. By doing additional actions which I mentioned beforehand, we learn how to contact with another society members. But books do not have the ability to prepare us for real life. For example, I have a friend named Farhad who graduated from a top university in our country. He always reads books, studies without gong outside. When he was a student in university he always was at the library and he did not do any additional actions. Now he has serious problems in his life, he cannot communicate with his wife, his friends his neighbor and whole society. Today he is an isolated person and got divorced.
In conclusion, I think it is better for universities to support additional actions equal to scientific subjects. It is good for students, managers and the whole community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...en, need to learn every day. If someone do not learn something, he would be consid...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
... New researches state that when someone have mental and physical health, he would be...
^^^^
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
..., etc. For instance, I have two nephews who are twins. One of them who named Ali is a p...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
... studies. He always reads books and the colleges library is his favorite place. Although...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d has both mental and physical health. Another reason which deserves some words...
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Line 5, column 615, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
... When he was a student in university he always was at the library and he did not do any ad...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97113402062 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74946424215 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501030927835 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5622242704 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.7741935484 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6451612903 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22580645161 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136424689754 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357556110008 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294056697654 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885182652224 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181864525115 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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