Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life Is it a positive or negative development

Essay topics:

Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative development?

It is argued that advertising is becoming more popular in our daily life. While I accept that this has both benefits and drawbacks, I would argue that there are more disadvantages than advantages.

On the one hand, advertisement has some benefits. Chief amongst them is that it can provide information to customers about products and services. Therefore, customers can make better shopping choices. Take an example, people watch TV commercials about different brands of shampoo products and they can choose the one that works best for them. Furthermore, advertising can raise people's awareness and knowledge about product development. It can be seen that advertisements help people discover more about technical devices. For instance, kids know a lot about technical devices because they watch many adverts about digital gadgets on television.

On the other hand, I strongly believe that there are great drawbacks which outweigh these benefits. The primary reason for this view is that an organization has to spend a huge amount of money on advertising. As a result, this lead to an increase in the cost of their products and services. For example, Vinamilk takes billion Vietnam dong to promote their new milk product. Another factor is that advertising encourages people to buy things that they do not really need. Apple's marketing and advertising campaigns, for instance, have a huge influence on the spending habits of the young generation. As a result, many the young are long to own the latest version of the iPhone even though their old still are perfectly adequate for their needs.

In conclusion, although there are some positive effects of advertisements, it seems to me that it is more disadvantages to using adverts.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a billion'.
Suggestion: a billion
...d services. For example, Vinamilk takes billion Vietnam dong to promote their new milk ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, really, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.229390681 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87761615034 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591397849462 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8168752147 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.8235294118 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.82352941176 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153234257227 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563372246385 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896826892039 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127013538792 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921903183877 0.056905535591 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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