There are many different types of music in the world today Why do we need music Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays

Today, several kinds of music are finding around world. I think, we need music crucially and people should give attention to its’ traditional music more than international music.

In the daily life, night life, when we are upset and depressed or happy, in the road trip or even in the shower, we want to music accompany to us because we think that the music feeds and full of our souls. I believe, it is easier to listen the things which we should say or hear instead of say or hear when we must face to adult life's responsibilities. In addition, many academician and psychologist remark that the music heals the people’s disorders and help for anxiety and provides to feel confidence. Furthermore, even though just a few minutes, it goes us away from the stressful work and school life.

A country or nation cannot be consider without their music, songs, local instruments or ballads. These culture makes the history of a country and it is formed consist of the pain and joy of the country people by defeat or victory of war, religious belief or even mythological factors. As a matter of fact, international musics’ roots are coming from these country music. Also its’ harmony and musical note based upon to the local songs. For this reason, if the traditional music is not exist, the international music is cannot developed that much and extended to the whole world. Thus, folk music is more valuable for everyone.

In conclusion, music is necessary part of human existance and in my view traditional music should comes first from international music.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, thus, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89138576779 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71910628243 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580524344569 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0825788458 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.461538462 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.512128014339 0.244688304435 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.204420032923 0.084324248473 242% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138079941015 0.0667982634062 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.36106464647 0.151304729494 239% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127541124293 0.056905535591 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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