Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university in order to travel or to work Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages

In many countries, youngsters want to explore different places and to know about the real job field which requires to take a break for one year after completing their high school as to travel the world as well as to do a job to experience a upsides and downsides of a life. However, I believe that taking a one year off will be a downside to their educational careers as it will take an immense effort for a high school graduate to complete with its younger students.

To begin with, a student who is not pursuing a tertiary education immediately after finishing school is chance of loosing a track of life in focusing towards studies. To be more precise, if a student stays away from the educational life over a long period, it is next impossible for him or her to get back to study life easily. For example, a recent survey conducted by Oxford University reveals that 95% of the USA students took study leave for traversing, could not achieve a satisfactory results in the first year of their college. Therefore, taking a break for work in exploring has negative effects on later academic life.

Moreover, students cannot comprehend the necessity of tertiary education because of gaining opportunities to earn money with high school certificate which will eventually lead their future to a downside. In other words, a juvenile would be least interested to go back to boring academic life, thus, creating problems for himself or herself in case of searching a high salaried job in the future. For instance, researchers around the world have found that down to having opportunities to make money, many high school graduates do not get back to earn a university degree. Thus, students give more priority to money rather than knowledge which has its own detrimental effects later in their lives. The only advantage a student gets a industry experience while doing a part-time job during his or her one year break and exploring a world while traveling to different destinations with their own expenses which are earned by their monthly or weekly salaried incomes from their firms.

To conclude, taking year off after completing twelfth grade gives an inevitable results in numerous negative ways to a young adult. Hence, the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, moreover, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, as well as, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 384.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9453125 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76277292322 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5390625 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6730259528 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.076923077 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5384615385 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220919559292 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841709808575 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04739975709 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14389711093 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280514857257 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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