Most countries spend a large amount of money in weapons to defend themselves though they are not at war. They should spend money to help the citizens in poor and disadvantaged countries. Discuss.
Today every country try to buy high tech weapons and equip their military with them, even though they are in pace. It is clear that technology change everything also weapon, so old weapons do not good any more. Some people say instead of span a lot of budget on weapons and military, we should pay attention to poor citizen and help them. This idea has both advantage and disadvantage.
Security is most highest priority in every country. A country can develop their economy, help to their poor citizen and so on when they are be in pace. A country without a strong military is witness and might...
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Sentence: Today every country try to buy high tech weapons and equip their military with them, even though they are in pace.
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Sentence: It is clear that technology change everything also weapon, so old weapons do not good any more.
Description: The fragment technology change everything is rare
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Sentence: A country without a strong military is witness and might attached by enemies and terrorists.
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Suggestion: Refer to might and attached
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Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 250 350
No. of Characters: 1156 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.976 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.624 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.399 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 87 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.866 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5