People should spend money on things that last a long time, such as expensive places of jewelry, than spend money on short-term pleasures like vacation.
Nowadays, many people want to spend their money on things that they can keep it for a long time. Personally, I think that people should spend their money on short-term pleasures than buying something like jewelry. There are some reasons that demonstrate the validity of my opinion: keep our family happy, give ourselves a break, and learn more about this world.
First of all, our family members are those who make our world, so we have to care about each other, share and have fun together. In this case, vacation is the best solution for people who want to have a happy time with their family. A ...
Subscribe as testbig VIP readers and get unlimited access to essays on the top list.
Sentence: A good illustration for this statement is my family, I remember that when I was 12, my brother and I had a conflict and that lead to we had a trip abroad in Singapore with our parent.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to to and we
Sentence: To sum up, spending money on short-term pleasures is better than buy things that last a long time.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to than and buy
It is on top list:
http://www.testbig.com/essay-categories/toefl
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2027 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.485 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.362 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.073 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.509 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5