TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Undoubtedly, modern life is associated with more complexity in today life that limits the free time for families to spend together. This brings up a controversial question: How could parents plan to best use of the limited time they have with their children? Personally speaking, I strongly believe that the best way is that parents help their children to do their homework. There are two major points in support of my viewpoint that are discussed in the following passage.

Firstly, helping children to do their schoolwork is an excellent way to extend their knowledge. When parents spend some time to help their children in their assignments, they would share their information, experience and ideas with their children. Definitely, children learn some basic knowledge from their books, but a knowledgeable parent goes beyond the books and enables his or her child to search more to find out latest news or the recent research related to each topic. Encouraging parents may also encourage their children to study more updated resources and publication in order to find more practical applications of each subject area. For example, a mother may provide her child an opportunity to visit a monument so as to better understand its aesthetic or architectural characteristics that has been already discussed in his history class. Therefore, all these activities give the child better understanding of each subject area.

Furthermore, learning more fun when children do their school assignments with their parents. Wise parents know their children’s interests and they would find it a good way to make their children deeply interested in learning. If a child is interested in cartoons, a knowledgeable parent would offer his or her child an educational cartoon that enables the child to learn more about a specific topic and exploit that knowledge to do a better job in an assignment. For instance, a watching a cartoon about bees would be certainly advantageous for a child to do her project on the lifestyle of bees. Besides this, doing schoolwork together makes it possible for parents and children to find some leisure time to play some educational games that makes learning process more interesting for children.

To summarize, taking into account all these factors, I conclude that it is better for busy parents to spend their free time to help their children with their homework because it would enable children to increase their knowledge and to enjoy learning more; therefore, it benefits the both sides, i.e. parents and children.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the best'.
Suggestion: to the best
...ersial question: How could parents plan to best use of the limited time they have with ...
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Line 3, column 416, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'out the latest'.
Suggestion: out the latest
...his or her child to search more to find out latest news or the recent research related to ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 726, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hild an opportunity to visit a monument so as to better understand its aesthetic or arch...
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Line 3, column 924, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s give the child better understanding of each subject area. Furthermore, learn...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21897810219 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88070871882 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501216545012 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6610113528 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0625 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6875 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289748077091 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110520882867 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920239663852 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206929812953 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660402959677 0.0645574589148 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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