Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.
Family is the cradle of society, nowadays in modern families woman usually are the ones who decide whether to have baby or not. Taking into account this trend, some people think women-mothers should be responsible to raise children solely, but there is another thought that bringing up children is also fathers' responsibility. I agree with the idea that fathers and mothers ought to be evaluated equally and I will attempt to elucidate my point of view below.
First of all, many children choose their fathers as their role models. They see their father as ideal person and try to imitiate him. Th...
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