Why you come to the pare to learn English?

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Why you come to the pare to learn English?

Pare City is the place to learn English. Many people learn English there. They have different reason to learn English. When i finished my study in senior high school, i browsing on the internet to search the best english course. I found pare is the best english course. I want to learn English beacuse i like English, i want to get scholarship in other country, and i want to get the best score of TOEFL or IELTS.

Firstly, i come to the Pare because i like English. I fell English is very important in our life. I like some people speak English in front of me. I always want to do it. I always want to speak English in excellent fluency. I want to be a people who can speak English. I will continue my study in university and i take a doctor or chemistry major. So, my mother said you must have English skill. Because, if we study in doctor or chemistry major, we will to learn English. But, i learn English in Pare not because my mother or my family. I want to have my will.

Secondly, i wrote in my diary book. I said “i want to get a scholarship in other country”. I always want to study in other country. That is my dream. If we study in other country, we can get a great job in our motherland. Because, we will be appreciated by other people. I want to study in Australia, Korea or Germany. I always give the motivation my self to study hard.

Finally, i could the best score of IELTS or TOEFL too. When we can get a good score of IELTS or TOEFL, we certainly can speak English. If i get a good score of IELTS or TOEFL, i can continue my study everywhere.

In the end, i have some purposes to learn English. I come to Pare because i like English, get a shcolarship, and the best score of IELTS or TOEFL. I am sure if someone want to learn English, they have reason. But, their reason are different from me.

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Sentence: I will continue my study in university and i take a doctor or chemistry major.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to chemistry and major

Sentence: Because, if we study in doctor or chemistry major, we will to learn English.
Description: The fragment chemistry major , is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace major with adverb
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to chemistry and major

Sentence: I always give the motivation my self to study hard.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by a determiner, possessive
Suggestion: Refer to motivation and my

Sentence: I am sure if someone want to learn English, they have reason.
Description: The fragment someone want to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace want with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular

Sentence: When i finished my study in senior high school, i browsing on the internet to search the best english course.
Error: english Suggestion: English

Sentence: I found pare is the best english course.
Error: english Suggestion: English

Sentence: I want to learn English beacuse i like English, i want to get scholarship in other country, and i want to get the best score of TOEFL or IELTS.
Error: beacuse Suggestion: because

Sentence: I come to Pare because i like English, get a shcolarship, and the best score of IELTS or TOEFL.
Error: shcolarship Suggestion: scholarship

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 351 350
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No. of Different Words: 123 200
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Average Word Length: 4 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.271 2.4
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 10.969 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.016 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.312 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.411 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.257 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5