1 An ancient traditional remedy for insomnia the scent of lavender flowers has now been proved effective In a recent study 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender scented pillows in a controlled room where their sl

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1. An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia—the scent of lavender flowers—has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

It might seem logical, at first glance, to agree with the report that lavender scented pillows helps to make feel better and causes sleep. However, in order to fully agree with the argument, we need to have significant amount of evidences. Though, the undrelying issue might have merit, because of lack of complete evidences and unwarrented assumptions, the report is unsubstainted and deeply flawed.

In order to fully evaluate the evidence, the first piece of evidence we need to have is it’s sample size and category of selection. The report do not mention about the age group, helth condition and sex about the volunteers. The same result may not be applicable with other person. Just conducting the experiment in thirty volunteer and concluding the result is not enough to gestate conclusion.

Similarly, the monitoring process is also doubtful. It can not give full idea about the sleeping ability about the volunteers. Like these people are feeling safer in the experimental site and they develp their sleeping habit. Perhaps the volunteers are just pretaining to sleep. In this case, the conclusion is not logically convincing.

The reporter assumes that the scent of pillow remains constant throughout the night. Regarding the specific case, the reporter assuems that, once it is treated with levender leaves, it will work for whole night. The assumption it self not compelling one because the scent migh have loose it’s strength within few hours. Therefour the reason behing the volunteers sleep is another like they feel relax during their experiment, or it might be possible that, they feel safer than their own home. Also, the dose is not mention in the report and we can not conclude any dose work for the choronic patient.
As the report is engaged with an assumptions like the sleepness can monitor through the elcectronic devices perfectly, scent power remains constant, chornic sleep problem is similar for all group and sex, which do a great role in reporter’s argument. If any one of these argument were prove to wrong, the whole report will be thrown into question. Clearly, the reporters required to take more diverse sample, monitor more effectively for long time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'volunteer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'volunteers'.
Suggestion: volunteers
...ust conducting the experiment in thirty volunteer and concluding the result is not enough...
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Line 7, column 228, Rule ID: IT_SELF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'itself'?
Suggestion: itself
...ll work for whole night. The assumption it self not compelling one because the scent mi...
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Line 8, column 270, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this argument' or 'these arguments'?
Suggestion: this argument; these arguments
...reporter's argument. If any one of these argument were prove to wrong, the whole report w...
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Line 8, column 290, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'proved', 'proven'.
Suggestion: proved; proven
...ment. If any one of these argument were prove to wrong, the whole report will be thro...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'similarly', 'so']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.227053140097 0.25644967241 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.166666666667 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0893719806763 0.0836205057962 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0579710144928 0.0520304965353 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0410628019324 0.0272364105082 151% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.113526570048 0.125424944231 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0338164251208 0.0416121511921 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63116067437 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.024154589372 0.026700313972 90% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.106280193237 0.113004496875 94% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0217391304348 0.0255425247493 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0024154589372 0.0127820249294 19% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2211.0 2731.13054187 81% => OK
No of words: 359.0 446.07635468 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.15877437326 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.370473537604 0.378187486979 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281337047354 0.287650121315 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192200557103 0.208842608468 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130919220056 0.135150697306 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63116067437 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573816155989 0.469332199767 122% => OK
Word variations: 65.2139688983 52.1807786196 125% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.95 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1481441841 57.7814097925 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.55 141.986410481 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.95 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.724660767414 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 46.0837047354 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.40909090909 1.8405768891 77% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177471278806 0.441005458295 40% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0979796590386 0.135418324435 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0628187739557 0.0829849096947 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.554330501588 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0825492544944 0.147661913831 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730983591739 0.193483328276 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276927330914 0.0970749176394 29% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.432285916315 0.42659136922 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0448309746265 0.0774707102158 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122294470323 0.312017818177 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0109179318216 0.0698173142475 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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