The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago Furthermore there has been

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The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

While it might be true that Forsythe's residents have healthier lifestyle compared to ten years ago; however, the author's argument does not make a cogent sense. It is easy to understand sale increase of kiran food products and sale decrease of sulia food products; but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions therefor, not strong enough to prove healthier lifestyle of citizens of Forsythe.
The author mentions that Forsythe's citizens' responses to a recent survey has indicated that they follow government nutritional recommendation more closely. However, the author does not provide any information about the survey questions. For example, residents might have responded to survey questions just by yes and no answers or by short answers which can make a different perspective. On the other hand, there is possibility that residents who answered those questions did not have enough knowledge about nutritional recommendations. Furthermore, there is no explanations about government nutritional recommendation. Moreover, there is no guarantee if citizens who answered the survey questions were honest or no. To strengthen his/her argument, the author needs investigation about survey details, recommendation information, and citizens' honestly.
Additionally, the author indicates that people bought food products containing kiran four times more; however, the author does not mention about total number of buyers and total number of citizens that is important to know. If the total population of Forsythe's residents has increased four times, the ratio of population to buyers is one. As a result, there is no increase in saling food products that contain kiran. Moreover, the author mentions that kiran reduces cholesterol, but there is no data provided about that scientific study.
The author implies that sulia food products that only few healthy residents usually eat has reduced sales, but the author does not bring any statistic evidence to prove it. The author needs to indicate how much of sulia sales had decreased and the reason for it.
The author's assumptions is persuasive when he or she gathers information about the survey questions, citizens’ knowledge, and statistic information about sale products. After answering these questions, the author can make such a conclusion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...compared to ten years ago; however, the authors argument does not make a cogent sense. ...
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Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no explanations'?
Suggestion: there are no explanations
...tritional recommendations. Furthermore, there is no explanations about government nutritional recommenda...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... had decreased and the reason for it. The authors assumptions is persuasive when ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, honestly, however, if, moreover, so, then, while, for example, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5641025641 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96472662829 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504273504274 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.445810343 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.882352941 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151886559507 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575354120023 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082649617236 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752991169735 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682371122032 0.0628817314937 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1906 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.415 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.879 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.515 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.392 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5