"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
The author concludes that to increase lane size because of the commuters complaints and traffic jams between Blue Highway and suburbs. moreover, last year's addition of a lane to the Green Highway was worsening of traffic jam on it. so, better alternative is to add bicycle lane to the Blue Highway because many residents are keen towards bicyclist and it is also encourage them to use bicycles to commute. all these will indirectly impact on rush of the traffic and help to reduce traffic. However, argument relies on certain assumptions which has no limpid evidences.
Firstly, the author conclude that commuters complain about the rush-hour traffic is because of shorter the size of a lane and hence traffic is increasing radically. This assumption holds no good point to conclude author's statement. The author should have been come up with the other alternatives beyond this wider the lane solution. The author should have strengthen the argument by giving more limpid evidences like the details of the complain, people's compain analysis, more statistical knowledge and data.
In addition, the author assumes that the proposal of motorist' lobby is a moot because last year by additing the lane in Green Highway was worsen the traffic. The author assumes the same results will be happen if the motorist proposal gets applied. This points hold no lucid evidences that strengthen the argumet. The author should have metion more points to bolster the statement to refute motorist's proposal.
Lastly, the author assumes that bicycles is the optimal solution to solve traffic and rush-hour problems. This also encourages the bicyclist. This assumpition is tootally irrelavent, there is no rigid proof of citizens of passion and the type of people. There might be only high class people lives in the Blue Highway. They might do not like to ride bicycle. The auther lacks credibility here. He could strengthen the argument by telling more clear data, traffic analysis, rush-hour detailed statistics.
In conclusion, the author have assumed that bicycle is the best solution to overcome the trafic conondrum. He should have given the more evidences and proofs to conclude his statment. The author could have strengthen the argument by discussing beyond bicycles idea and motorist proposal or addition the lane. before concluding that bicycles will reduce the traffic problem.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author should have strengthen the argument by giving more limpid evidences like the details of the complain, people's compain analysis, more statistical knowledge and data.
Error: compain Suggestion: complain
Sentence: In addition, the author assumes that the proposal of motorist' lobby is a moot because last year by additing the lane in Green Highway was worsen the traffic.
Error: additing Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This points hold no lucid evidences that strengthen the argumet.
Error: argumet Suggestion: argument
Sentence: The author should have metion more points to bolster the statement to refute motorist's proposal.
Error: metion Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This assumpition is tootally irrelavent, there is no rigid proof of citizens of passion and the type of people.
Error: tootally Suggestion: totally
Error: assumpition Suggestion: assumption
Error: irrelavent Suggestion: irrelevant
Sentence: The auther lacks credibility here.
Error: auther Suggestion: author
Sentence: In conclusion, the author have assumed that bicycle is the best solution to overcome the trafic conondrum.
Error: trafic Suggestion: traffic
Error: conondrum Suggestion: conundrum
Sentence: He should have given the more evidences and proofs to conclude his statment.
Error: statment Suggestion: statement
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 1954 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.142 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.502 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.392 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
... jams between Blue Highway and suburbs. moreover, last years addition of a lane to the G...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...lue Highway and suburbs. moreover, last years addition of a lane to the Green Highway...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 364, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...e keen towards bicyclist and it is also encourage them to use bicycles to commute. all th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...ourage them to use bicycles to commute. all these will indirectly impact on rush of...
^^^
Line 4, column 357, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...e lane solution. The author should have strengthen the argument by giving more limpid evid...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 433, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...re limpid evidences like the details of the complain, peoples compain analysis, more statist...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 139, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
... additing the lane in Green Highway was worsen the traffic. The author assumes the sam...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 207, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...ude his statment. The author could have strengthen the argument by discussing beyond bicyc...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 310, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
...motorist proposal or addition the lane. before concluding that bicycles will reduce th...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 310, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...motorist proposal or addition the lane. before concluding that bicycles will reduce th...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, then, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27368421053 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58260213641 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507894736842 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3122362179 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248654829193 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073311836549 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086822624195 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150536559376 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668442744106 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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