Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author suggests that the implementation of students at Omega University grading the effectiveness of their professors capability resulted in high grades of the students and therefore led to decline in the employability of it's students. The evidence in the prompt does not correlate with the conclusion at all.
First, there is no proof that professors assign higher grades to student based on the evaluation procedure. The prompt stated that the overall grade increased by 30% and prematurely assume that this is due to the evaluation process. Perhaps it could be that students generally increased in their learning ability and improve in their various courses. It is also possible that over the years, Omega University employed more professors that are efficient in their work which also acts as a contributing factor for the increase in grades. If this is true, the author assumption that increase in grades in Omega University does not hold water.
Secondly, the case of potential employers assuming that the students grades at Omega University doesn't account for their achievement based on the new procedure. How many employers and/or company gave this review? Could it be that the employers that gave this review are specific to a particular field of interest only, perhaps science-related job only? If the author is indicating the review of 2 or 3 potential employers has validity for other employers then the assumption is considerably flawed.
Thirdly, the employability factor of Omega University vs Alpha University begs to be questions. The author only assumption for the increase in the employement of alpha University students vs Omega University is solely on the basis of grades. Could it be that Alpha University students possess other employability factors that Omega University lacks? If certain employers are looking for soft skills asides grades that Alpha University students possess and Omega University students lack, of course employers would give out jobs to students from Alpha University over Omega University. If this case is true, then the author needs to reevaluate it's conclusion.
Finally, what is the ratio of students in Omega University to Alpha University? The population of Omega University may be significantly higher than Alpha University. For instance if the ration of students is 15:1 for Omega and Alpha University respectively, then it will seem as though Alpha University gets employed more than Omega University which is not true because for every one student job, Omega will need to have 15 students employed to balance the scale. If any of this is true then the assumption of the author is weakened.
In conclusion, before Omega University terminates it's evaluation process in order to improve the prospective job available for their students, they need to make more findings on why there is a decrease in the employability of their students compare to Alpha University Otherwise they risk reducing the grade of their students without concrete reasons.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2486 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.168 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.887 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.905 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.185 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.369 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...the students grades at Omega University doesnt account for their achievement based on ...
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Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...dure. How many employers and/or company gave this review? Could it be that the empl...
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Suggestion:
...ndicating the review of 2 or 3 potential employers has validity for other employe...
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Line 5, column 464, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...students employed to balance the scale. If any of this is true then the assumption...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ts compare to Alpha University Otherwise they risk reducing the grade of their st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2530.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29288702929 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92752210453 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42050209205 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 820.8 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3361775222 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.476190476 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7619047619 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346490756018 0.218282227539 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127580875495 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950263363142 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222663783297 0.128457276422 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696811232899 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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