The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded
from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their
own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands
that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological
parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s
conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach
to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate
students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-
rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
The writer of the article says that interview-centered approach to study child-rearing cultures in the group of islands would be more accurate than observation-centered approach. He does not mention relevant details and date that support his conclusion.
The anthropologist does not mention how he has arrived at the conclusion just from the fact that his conclusions about the child-rearing habits of people of Tertia contradict with those of another anthropologist who employed observation-centered approach of investigation. The author does not cite any correlation between the people the children talk about the most and the people who spend most time with them or in general the people that do the activities associated with child-rearing. If there seems to be strong correlation, only then can it be concluded that observation-based approach is inferior or less reliable than interview-based approach.
Unless the author is expecting the reader to assume that there is a direct correlation between amount of time a child spends with an adult and the time he spends taking about that adult in an interview the conclusion seems baseless.Even in such a case, it is possible that even though some aspects of child-rearing are done by villagers other than the children's biological parents just because major aspects are done by their biological parents, the children might talk more about their parents. It is also possible that only because they love their parents the most, they talk about their parents the most.
Even if we assume that interview-based approach was superior in Tertia, the author does not cite any data to that shows that same conclusions would be valid in other Islands. If not, it is possible that interview-based approach might lead the researchers to all the wrong conclusions in other Islands.
In summary, unless any relevant evidence, data and explanation is given to support the it the intended audience of this article must be skeptical of the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1647 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.179 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.229 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.994 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.733 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.222 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 233, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
...interview the conclusion seems baseless.Even in such a case, it is possible that eve...
^^^^
Line 17, column 84, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...ata and explanation is given to support the it the intended audience of this article m...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, in general, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33753943218 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30462381617 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473186119874 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.053380136 57.8364921388 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.2 119.503703932 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110292956236 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405011623263 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423292961247 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0549796366637 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280543733101 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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