The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
The following argument is flawed for several reasons. Primarily, the argument states that according to a survey, Oceania University's faculty retention is higher because of their free-tuition policy for professors when we do not know how many people took the survey. There is a possibility that not many faculties took part in the survey. There may be other factors too which can lead to the retention of Faculties in Oceania University.
The argument fails to provide the justification that the free tuition policy at the university is the factor for higher faculty retention. For one, the faculties at Oceania University might have less qualification and are less likely to find job outside the university as compared to the faculties at Seatown University. The argument would have been stronger had it provided the similarity in the reputation of the two universities and the qualification of faculties in the universities. Even then, the argument would have to further prove that the other factors line university meal plans, Faculty housing system etc are similar for both the universities.
The argument also leaves many other unanswered questions. It does not state anything about the income level of the faculties in the two universities. It is possible that the yearly income of the faculties in Oceania University is lower that of faculties in Seatown University. And, free-tuition policy is just an added benefit to compensate for their lower salary. Even if we assume that the salaries in both the universities are same, their might be other benefits like free housing, given to faculties in Seatown University which might not be available for Faculties in Oceania University.
Finally, The argument assumes without warrant that the number of faculties in both the universities are same. There is a possibility that there are 100 faculties in Seatown university out of which 20 left this year. Whereas, there are only 20 faculties in Oceania University out of which 10 left. While the number of faculties left in Seatown university are more, the percentage of faculty retention is much higher than Oceania University.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case for the reasons of Faculty retention at Oceania University.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1886 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.153 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.866 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.76 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.181 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nia University. Finally, The argument assumes without warrant that the number ...
^^
Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...versity out of which 20 left this year. Whereas, there are only 20 faculties in Oceania...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, may, so, then, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27595628415 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93521094411 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418032786885 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5844459881 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.277777778 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44533512151 0.218282227539 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167202230299 0.0743258471296 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980395656145 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273943572574 0.128457276422 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474125047358 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.3550499002 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.197005988 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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