The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunny Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the shower-heads in the first three buildings of the Sunny Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunny Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying shower-heads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunny Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">In this memo, the owner of Sunny towers apartment complex claim that modifying shower-heads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the apartment complex will increase their profit even more dramatically. To support her argument, she points out that changing shower-heads will obviously in much savings for Sunny Corporation, Also, there are few complaints about these changes from the residents. Careful scrutiny reveals that this argument has several logical flaws.
First, the owner hastily assumes that the few complaints from residents actually mean that most of them don't have dissatisfaction. Common sense tells us, however, most people follow the social way that doesn't show inner thought.
In this case, although they have complaints about lower water flow, they would not reveal their minds. If this is true, we can not be convinced by her argument.
Second, based on the fact which is not certain, the owner assumes that the amount of using water will decrease. Actually, the lower flow does not mean lower usage of water. For example, lower water flow per certain time can increase the time of taking a shower. As a result, the last amount of water used during taking a shower once is the same as before. If the owner cannot present us specified data that changing shower-heads actually decrease the amount of water used, this argument is not cogent
Finally, if we admit other problematic assumptions are true, there is still another questionable problem. Even if few people have complaints, because social networking service or internet based blog is common in modern society, they can write articles about the shortcoming of this apartment on the Internet. These articles could affect the value of apartment and cause for potential residents to cancel their contracts with the corporation. As a result, the apartment complex's profit will decrease. Until the owner suggests his remedy for these possibilities, this argument is still controversial.
To summarize, this argument is dubious as it stands. To make her claim more persuasive, she has to survey the real degree of dissatisfaction which the residents have and show us data about the different amount of water usage before and after. To rate better, we have to be given a resolve for the possibilities that the drawbacks of this apartment complex have gossiped decrease final profit of the corporation.</span><br>
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK, but better to say: it is from 'One month ago, ...'
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly. need to argue:
I predict that modifying shower-heads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunny Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1990 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.396 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...changing shower-heads will obviously in much savings for Sunny Corporation, Also, th...
^^^^
Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...sidents actually mean that most of them dont have dissatisfaction. Common sense tell...
^^^^
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... most people follow the social way that doesnt show inner thought. In this case, alt...
^^^^^^
Line 10, column 244, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...amount of water usage before and after. To rate better, we have to be given a reso...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, as to, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34278350515 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0158152496 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520618556701 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8689708528 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.105263158 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204629383124 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582231643071 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720096251933 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100135216926 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853181963219 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.