The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The owner of the Sunnyside Tower complex assumes that with showerheads adjustment to reduce the water pressure to one-third of what it used to be, all twelve buildings will use less water. Based on the author, corporate will save more money because they should pay less for water. The author mentions because only few complaints have been reported from first three building, so all other none building will be fine with the showerheads’ adjustment too. The owner of the building complex needs verifiable evidences to prove his/her argument.
First of all, the author mentions that only few complaints about low water pressure have been reported from three building since last month; however, the author does not mention the total number of residents and total number of complaints from those three buildings. Also, complains are just for last month. The owner of the complex might get more complaints in the future from those same three building because some residents might think that the change is temporary.
Moreover, the author promises high profits for the corporation without knowing the exact usage of water before and after showerheads changes. The author just accepts that people are going to use less water with the new showerhead changes, but probably, residents are going to spend more time to use water because the pressure is lower than before. Thus, the corporate will not save money because more water will be used and they should pay for it.
In addition, the author concludes that same number of residents for other nine building are going to complain like those three buildings; however, people living in other nine building might have different reactions to water flow adjustment compare to residents in first three buildings. Residents in other nine building might be more busy employees with less extra time to spend under shower. As a result, number of complaints might be more than number of complaints in the first three buildings.
Lastly but not least, indicating the range age of population of each building is important because it can affect the numbers of complaints. For example, it might be more elderly and retirement residents in the first three building. So, they might have more time to spend under shower and do not complain about it. But the range age for other nine building can be different. For example, they might be more parents’ population which is going to bring more complaints about the water pressure change because parents are already so busy with their works and kids. Thus, they might get more frustrated to spend more time under shower.
The owner of these buildings should answer different questions to make sure that reducing water pressure by adjusting showerheads will save money for managers. They need to consider age group and total number of populations of each building. Also, they should know the water usage number before and after showerheads changes. With these persuasive answers the author can prove his/her claim.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2440 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.959 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.324 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.391 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.973 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.35 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 632, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, third, thus, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2504.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11020408163 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41525762348 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.383673469388 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0106028552 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.869565217 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3043478261 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184846341631 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061033487824 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638751944632 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113200135706 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767231173937 0.0628817314937 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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