The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager One month ago all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one t | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."

According to the letter written by the owner of Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager, it suggest that showerhead in all twelve building should be change as this would help in saving water are reducing the tax. To validte his point, owner mention that as there has been not so many complains from the first three buildings residents about the new showerhead change, so the rest of the residents of the complex would also not complain about it. The assumption made by the owner is unpersuasive and illogical and this would be proved in the following essay:
First, the owner mention that in the first three building of the complex the showerhead where change. By this new showerhead the water flow is restricted to one-third of previous water flow. The owner has not mention anywhere the amount of water use, before and after the showerhead is changed. It might happen that, as the water flow is restricted people are taking longer baths and water usage level has not gone down. The owner should present us with the actual reading of water usuage that was before and after changing the showerhead. This would help us know whether the change of showerhead had any benfit or not.
Secondly, the owner has mention that only few people have complain about the low water pressure. 'Few' is very vague because for someone 'few' could mean 1-2 people whereas for others it could be 19-20 people also. Unless, the owner gives the exact number of people who complain about the change, it would be difficult to assume that people are pleasue with this new adjustment and have no problem. It could also happen that very few houses are occupied in the first three buildings, so the number of complains are also less.
Thirdly, the owner wants to change the showerhead in all the twelve buildings as this would save water and reduce the amount of water tax which the complex pay's each month. But by changing the showerhead in all the houses of twelve building would increase the cost and this would affect the profit. For instance, it might happen that the water tax which the complex pays per month is way less then the cost of changing the showerhead. So, a proper cost analysis should be done before a final call is taken.
In conclsuion, the owner should look at all the different points which are mentioned above and take it under consideration before he decides to change the showerhead in all twelve building. It should not happen that the residents are not happy with the discussion and the cost also got increase due to the new showerhead. The owner of Sunnyside Tower complex apartment complex should do a proper analyses and think in a larger perpestive rather then seeing the immediate benefit.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'suggests'?
Suggestion: suggests
...rs apartment complex to its manager, it suggest that showerhead in all twelve building ...
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Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'changed'?
Suggestion: changed
...erhead in all twelve building should be change as this would help in saving water are ...
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Line 2, column 210, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
... previous water flow. The owner has not mention anywhere the amount of water use, befor...
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Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'complained'.
Suggestion: complained
...r has mention that only few people have complain about the low water pressure. Few is ve...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...eas for others it could be 19-20 people also. Unless, the owner gives the exact numb...
^^^^
Line 4, column 394, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... the complex pays per month is way less then the cost of changing the showerhead. So...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...and think in a larger perpestive rather then seeing the immediate benefit.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, as for, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75957446809 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33603165888 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414893617021 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3864293254 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.736842105 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7368421053 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310132210859 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103814893976 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872678553772 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182866560683 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855235436737 0.0628817314937 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, whereas, as for, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments