The argument here states that Centerville High School must sponsor some program to curb driving fatality involved by teenagers. This argument fails to maintain several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To satisfy this conclusion, the author’s reason is that the parents at Centerville are busy and they cannot afford outside driving institution fees to enhance the driving safety perfection on their children. However, careful scrutiny of evidence reveals that it provides little justification to the author’s conclusion. Hence, the argument is considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, the argument readily assumes that in the two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. This is merely and the assumption made without much solid ground. The argument does not mention the total number of road accident occurred in the last two years in that area. There can be a possibility that the number of accident involving teenager was very less in comparison to the total number of the accident. There is also a possibility that the accident was happened due to the flaw of another vehicle. We have seen many accidents where the small vehicles were damaged by big vehicles. However, the argument would have been better if the writer provided statistical data of road fatality of the past two years.
Secondly, the author argues here that since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. This again is a weak analogy used by the argument and it does not demonstrate the clear road sign to strengthen the argument. The argument fails to explain what the parents do in their weekend. If the parents really want to enhance driving safety, they can go driving with their children on weekend. This argument proves the parent irresponsible to their children.
Moreover, the arguments state that the parents at Centerville are busy and they cannot afford outside driving institution fees to enhance the driving safety perfection on their children. However, careful scrutiny of evidence reveals that it provides little support for the author’s statement in various critical aspects and raises skeptical questions. For example, how is the average total annual income of the parents of Centerville? How much it will cost to join outside driving school? How much extra time will need to school to manage driving class? Does not it hamper the other academic schedule of school? Does school have sufficient fund to run the extra driving class? Without the convincing answer to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the author’s argument is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide clear and more concrete information about the total road accident happened by different age group people in the past two years. Information of parent’s average annual income of parents will help to strengthen the argument.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 509 350
No. of Characters: 2597 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.75 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.102 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.605 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 206 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 162 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.179 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.774 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.357 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.463 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 572, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'hampers'?
Suggestion: hampers
...ol to manage driving class? Does not it hamper the other academic schedule of school? ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2683.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 509.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27111984283 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77998361636 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459724950884 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 833.4 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6396331837 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8214285714 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1785714286 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18501889379 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525372037323 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453951646147 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111441725229 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508063988714 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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