The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrolment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The claim presented in the given memo states that the there are likely chances of new enrolment of the students in Buckingham College and the increasing prices of rent off-campus will surely bring students to on campus dormitories which should be attractive and should lure the students to go for on-campus housing. Stated in this way the director demonstrates several logical fallacies through instances such as one where in the director has assumed that the students enrolment will get doubled in next 50 years and there should be adequate dormitories for students at that moment of time. The conclusion of the argument relies heavily on the baseless assumptions, for which there is lack of proper evidencing; Hence, the argument is weak and unconvincing. The major logical fallacies are detailed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly, The director of the Buckingham College readily assumes that the based on the current scenarios the number of students enrolling in the college will get doubled over the next 50 years. This is baseless assumption, taking such a huge time span into consideration will just mislead the judgement; One does not know what will happen in the next few years, for instance the Covid-19 situation, no one knew what was going to happen, every part of the country will be in lockdown and everything will be shut and there will be such a huge economic downfall. Therefore just by seeing the current situation one cannot assume that the same thing will happen in the upcoming years with the same rate.
The director should have done a proper research and maximum should have taken of 5 years of time span to consider the requirements of the dormitories.
Secondly, The director states that the average rate of an apartment has increased from past few years but agin no proper evidence has been provided that how this will effect the rate of number of enrolling students for on-campus dormitories. Maybe it is possible that the most of the students who are applying in Buckingham college are locals and reside nearby or just few miles and are capable of doing ups and down daily to commute to college. Also there are chances that the students will not enrol for on-campus dormitories because they won't be able to find that specific freedom which they could get, if they live off-campus. It is also assume that the new attractive dormitories will lure the students to enrol for on-campus dormitory instead of off-campus. There are several possibilities that students are here to study, not to enjoy the luxury or the fascinating services provided by the college. The director could have ordered a survey where they could ask few number of students about their choices between off-campus hosing or on-campus housing and then could have take the decision.
Therefore concluding, there are several groundless assumptions which should be nullified and proper survey should be done or proper advice should be taken from the different eminent persons in their respective field before taking the decision.Without the above defined evidence, the argument continues to remain unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 461, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...re in the director has assumed that the students enrolment will get doubled in next 50 y...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... will be such a huge economic downfall. Therefore just by seeing the current situation on...
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Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ce has been provided that how this will effect the rate of number of enrolling student...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s and down daily to commute to college. Also there are chances that the students wil...
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Line 7, column 643, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'assumed'.
Suggestion: assumed
...et, if they live off-campus. It is also assume that the new attractive dormitories wil...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...e ordered a survey where they could ask few number of students about their choices between...
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Line 7, column 1079, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...r on-campus housing and then could have take the decision. Therefore concluding, ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...d then could have take the decision. Therefore concluding, there are several groundles...
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Line 9, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Without
...ective field before taking the decision.Without the above defined evidence, the argumen...
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Line 9, column 293, Rule ID: CONTINUE_TO_REMAIN[1]
Message: Use simply 'remains'.
Suggestion: remains
...he above defined evidence, the argument continues to remain unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2623.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10311284047 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6990186197 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451361867704 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.4317630259 57.8364921388 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.866666667 119.503703932 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.2666666667 23.324526521 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251129029526 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947435367415 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911401484488 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129364057484 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746921425658 0.0628817314937 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.3799401198 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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