The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The author in the memorandum points out that the time devoted to weather and local news should be resotred to its former level in their late-night news program. To virify such a agurment, the author offers some reasons, which may seem tenable at first glance. With unwarranted assumptions and poor evidences, this argument fails to be wholley compelling as it stands.
To start with, a main peoblem in the author's point of view is that the author simply assume that the most number of complaints about their station's caoverage of weather and local news can show that people care more about the weather and local news. Since, the author does not provide any strong evidence to support this assumption, it is not unreaonable to question the author's agrument. If the author can provide evidence to refute some possible situations such as people complain more about the content of weather and local news just because these part are really lower quality than the national news, and then it can't show people care more about the weather and local news. Then the validity of the author's conclusion will be significant strengthened.
Additionally, the author claims that local businesses just cancel their late-night news program advertising contracts with their station and aussme the reason is that they decrease the time of weather and local news. There is no evidence to support such a causal relationship. If we can find evidence showing that the local businesses cancel the advertising contracts by other reasons such as just the company's business strategy and have nothing to do with the televation station. Given this circumstance, the author's point of view will be untenable.
Finally, the author thinks that through restoring the time for weather and local news to its former level, station can attract more viewers to their program and can avoid the futher advertising revenues. For this point, if there are some evidence shows that the number of viewers are not decrease as the time of weather and local news decrease in the past year, then station can't attract more viewers by incresing the time of weather and local news. For this situation, the author can't hold his/her point.
To sum up, there are, as I have presented before, a lot of obvious flaws that need to be addressed for lacking tenable evidence and sound reasoning. Otherwise, any impetus implementation of the auhor's conclusion might be backfire.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...late-night news program. To virify such a agurment, the author offers some reason...
^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ity than the national news, and then it cant show people care more about the weather...
^^^^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...ity than the national news, and then it cant show people care more about the weather...
^^^^
Line 3, column 703, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nd local news. Then the validity of the authors conclusion will be significant strength...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...decrease in the past year, then station cant attract more viewers by incresing the t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 482, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...al news. For this situation, the author cant hold his/her point. To sum up, there...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, really, so, then, such as, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05735660848 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54286820203 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453865336658 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4861540955 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.75 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0124586715572 0.218282227539 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00528080697543 0.0743258471296 7% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00807488162713 0.0701772020484 12% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0102078692675 0.128457276422 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00788891043254 0.0628817314937 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...late-night news program. To virify such a agurment, the author offers some reason...
^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ity than the national news, and then it cant show people care more about the weather...
^^^^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...ity than the national news, and then it cant show people care more about the weather...
^^^^
Line 3, column 703, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nd local news. Then the validity of the authors conclusion will be significant strength...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...decrease in the past year, then station cant attract more viewers by incresing the t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 482, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...al news. For this situation, the author cant hold his/her point. To sum up, there...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, really, so, then, such as, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 401.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05735660848 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54286820203 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453865336658 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4861540955 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.75 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0124586715572 0.218282227539 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00528080697543 0.0743258471296 7% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00807488162713 0.0701772020484 12% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0102078692675 0.128457276422 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00788891043254 0.0628817314937 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.