The author states that there is a serious unemployment problem in city of Hillview. He offers an argument that making the town attractive to Autotech, an automobile manufacturing company, by offering tax incentives and conducting a campaigns will resolve Hillview's unemployment problem. At first glance the argument looks cogent and comprehensive but on thorough scrutiny we notice that the argument is rife with fallacies. The author fails to provide any supporting statistics or an analogy to an observation that is based on a similar situation. Before accepting the argument the author must address some very important questions.
Firstly, the author casually states that the cause of large scale unemployment is due to non availability of jobs. This assumption is not supported with any evidence. There might be numerous reasons as to why the unemployment rate is high. It might be due to recession at national level. Another cause might be that the country is at a state of war and hence not many companies are ready to invest in plants in the city. Consequently the companies might have also pulled out of their current projects and funding too. Without making it clear as to what the cause of unemployment is, the argument just cannot be accepted.
Secondly, the author assumes that Hillview landfill is the perfect location for automobile manufacturing plant. Author does not support this with any sort of statistic or evidence to support this. The landfill's topology could be exceptionally bad for constructing a plant. Before making such a analogy the author needs to provide more details about how he came to the conclusion that the landfill is the best location for the manufacturing plant.
Moreover, it is not clear from the argument that if the residents will be considered for the building and staffing of the manufacturing plant. What if Autotech already has enough employees and they are just looking to expand their facility's spread. What if immigrants are considered for the building task? Even if eventually the construction of the manufacturing plants does start off and the unemployed residents of Hillview are not employed in the project, the argument collapses on itself. To be certain that the residents are given employment preference the City Council must get involved and ascertain that they strike a deal with the manufacturing company.
To conclude, the author's memo needs to rid of number of assumptions he has made and instead look to bolster his analogy on facts. In addition to that to make a more formidable argument the author needs to provide irrefutable evidence, without which the argrument simply cannot be accepted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a campaign' or simply 'campaigns'?
Suggestion: a campaign; campaigns
... offering tax incentives and conducting a campaigns will resolve Hillviews unemployment pro...
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Line 1, column 549, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n that is based on a similar situation. Before accepting the argument the author must ...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... ready to invest in plants in the city. Consequently the companies might have also pulled ou...
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Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'landfills'' or 'landfill's'?
Suggestion: landfills'; landfill's
...tistic or evidence to support this. The landfills topology could be exceptionally bad for...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...onstructing a plant. Before making such a analogy the author needs to provide mor...
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Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ufacturing company. To conclude, the authors memo needs to rid of number of assumpti...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'as to', 'in addition', 'sort of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242489270386 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.169527896996 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0751072961373 0.0836205057962 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0536480686695 0.0520304965353 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0278969957082 0.0272364105082 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122317596567 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0429184549356 0.0416121511921 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92937779856 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0407725321888 0.026700313972 153% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.128755364807 0.113004496875 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0236051502146 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0171673819742 0.0127820249294 134% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2666.0 2731.13054187 98% => OK
No of words: 432.0 446.07635468 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1712962963 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.393518518519 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.310185185185 0.287650121315 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.236111111111 0.208842608468 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155092592593 0.135150697306 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92937779856 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 207.018472906 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497685185185 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 55.7542544015 52.1807786196 107% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.7826086957 23.2022227129 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6204065539 57.7814097925 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.913043478 141.986410481 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7826086957 23.2022227129 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.724660767414 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 49.8011272142 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.62393162393 1.8405768891 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488607358137 0.441005458295 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104298890514 0.135418324435 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0642919548295 0.0829849096947 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.545132822311 0.58762219726 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166058630639 0.147661913831 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191574406921 0.193483328276 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110345844338 0.0970749176394 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.384503157372 0.42659136922 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0536167367282 0.0774707102158 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.341143161606 0.312017818177 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289766640393 0.0698173142475 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.87684729064 204% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 13.0 5.36822660099 242% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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