In the memo, the vice president of a food distribution company concludes that they should sign a contract with Buzzoff Pest Control Company to give the safety of their foods in their warehouses in Palm City to the hand of this company again. The vice president reached this conclusion based on the Fly-Away Pest Control Company's incompetency, with which they signed a contract recently, in eradicating and controlling the pest in their warehouses in Palm City, which has applied great financial damage to the company. Nevertheless, while the conclusion drawn by the author might hold water, it rests on several answered questions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus, the following three questions must be addressed.
First of all, are all the pests similar in all regions? The pests might be different in Palm City and Wintervale. It is possible that the methods implemented by Buzzoff company work in Wintervale, but those methods have no effect on pests in Palm City, and because of this reason, the company has decided to supersede Buzzof company with Fly-Away company in Palm City. If this scenario has merit, the vice president's assertion that based on the difference between the worth of the food that was lost during the last month in the warehouses in these two regions, the company should give pest control of all its warehouses to Buzzoff company is significantly hampered.
Secondly, are the size of warehouses even in these regions? Maybe the warehouse in Palm City is so gigantic and incorporates a total worth of $100,000 of food, $20,000 of which was destroyed last month, which equals to 20 percent loss. On the other hand, the total worth of food in Wintervale warehouse was $20,000, $10,000 of which was ruined, which is equal to 50 percent loss. The argument does not hold water if the above is true.
Finally, does the lower charge of Fly-Away company compensate for the financial damage they might introduce to the company every month? The difference between Buzzoff company's charge to take control of the pests in the warehouse in Palm City and Fly-Away company's charge to do the same might be above $20,000, which is the amount of money that the company lost due to pest invasion in their warehouse in Palm City. If it is true that the difference between these two companies' charge outcompete the amount of pecuniary damage that Fly-Away company apply to the distribution company, the credibility of the writer's claim decreases substantially.
To recapitulate, it is possible that the company will benefit if the vice president puts Buzzoff company in charge of controlling and fighting the pests in all the company's warehouses throughout the country, including the one in Palm City. Nonetheless, as it stands now, the argument relies on three unanswered questions that render its conclusion unpersuasive at best and specious at worst. Therefore, the author must provide answers to all the above-mentioned crucial questions.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2459 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.754 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.399 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2511.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 492.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10365853659 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8069709112 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416666666667 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.0855338358 57.8364921388 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.70786347227 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406176515937 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126916367267 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11992069359 0.0701772020484 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2410192896 0.128457276422 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115796080361 0.0628817314937 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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