The manager argues that the WWAC radio station should change its rock-music radio style into the news-and-talk format due to the current situation that with the declining number of rock-roll music listerns of the station, the author found that the news-and-talk format is becoming more and more popular in that area. However, we should collect more evidence to prove the feasiblity of changing radio station styles, including the accurate population numbers and the local radio competetion, in that there are some loopholes in the memorandum. Also, whether the new redidents' acceptence of this modification is still in question. We should evaluate the evidence carefully.
To begin with, the numbers of population mentioned in the memorandum are not accurate, or in other word, due to the different scales of population, these numbers are not comparable. Firstly, we do not know how serious the declining is, or to what extent it would influence the radio station, in that maybe there were few people who did not like to listen to the rock music played by the WWAC. Likewise, the population growth of retired new redidents is certainly not clear enough, moreover, how many of them would like to listen to the rock music in the radio is not clear. Also,merely judging from the fact that several local stores were closed is not convicing enough to prove that the people in this place would not like to listen to the music anymore.
In addition, the reasoning of the memorandum is not convincing. As the new residents coming to the palce who would enjoy their retired life, whether they would accept the news-and-talk programs is not clear, more surveys are required to figure out their preference. Also, the local closing down of the music stores does not necessarily mean that the people here does not like to listen to the music ,however, they may use the more advanced technology to enjoy music like the Internet, possibly, they would like to drive to listen to some rock and roll to keep on focus. Thus, the connections of the future of the radio station which may change styles and the local people prefernce is still unclear. Thus it would not be a good idea to change styles without comprehensive survey.
Finally, the author does not show us the local competitions of the radio stations. As we do not know the other rock-music radio stations' performance, it would be arbitary to conclude the music radio stations would be broke down. Likewise, on the other hand, without the conditions of the news-and-talk radio stations, we could not figure out how conflict the competition in this format area is. As a possible new radio station, it would be dangerous for the WWAC change its style into this format. What's more, the atuhor does not tell us whether there are some professional DJs who can host such program which keep on talking and debating.
In all, I totally comprehend the manager of the WWAC, while the assumption is not compelling due to the flaws in the memorandum. There are more survey needed to prove the author's statement if he/she want to change the styles of WWAC. Firstly, the author should make clear of the scales of each group of people to weigh the severence of the rock-roll situation, and the importance of changing the style into the news-and-talk.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 560 350
No. of Characters: 2660 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.865 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.75 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.514 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.376 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 514, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...adio competetion, in that there are some loopholes in the memorandum. Also, wheth...
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Line 3, column 579, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , merely
...ck music in the radio is not clear. Also,merely judging from the fact that several loca...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ere does not like to listen to the music ,however, they may use the more advanced ...
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Line 5, column 701, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ocal people prefernce is still unclear. Thus it would not be a good idea to change s...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...competition in this format area is. As a possible new radio station, it would be ...
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Line 7, column 500, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...WWAC change its style into this format. Whats more, the atuhor does not tell us wheth...
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Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'surveys'?
Suggestion: surveys
...flaws in the memorandum. There are more survey needed to prove the authors statement i...
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Line 9, column 172, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ere are more survey needed to prove the authors statement if he/she want to change the ...
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Line 9, column 200, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...o prove the authors statement if he/she want to change the styles of WWAC. Firstly, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, so, still, thus, while, in addition, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 55.5748502994 149% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2732.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 558.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89605734767 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61994910206 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421146953405 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 845.1 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9204786061 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.095238095 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261620391862 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797996125567 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643173895429 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159884741809 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529099404562 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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